“Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.ould expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
The argument states that investing in Techcorporation will be profitable. In drawing this conclusion, the argument reasons that as eighty percent of current consumer is dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider, people should invest in this company. However, there is some unwarranted assumptions behind this conclusion. The investor need to clear this assumptions to fully evaluate the above conclusion.
Firstly, what is the reason of customer dissatisfaction with the current satellite service provider? The newsletter did not give any data regarding this. If the previous dissatisfactions are still extant with the current provider, then the investor will not be attracted to this investment and it will also not be profitable for the current investors.
Secondly, what was the questions of the consumer survey of the newsletter? The newsletter did not specify any info regarding this. Why are the other 20 percent respondents satisfied? The author also did not give any data about this.
Thirdly, how can the author be sure that investing in the company will be highly profitable? What are the obvious reasons? It may not become a profitbale company. Without fully evalaute its company structure and management capability, we cannot be sure about this. Also, investing in a new company is a risk sometimes.
In conclusion, the auhtor needs to give full obseravations of his survey not an incomplete conclusion. Also the full question details of the survey need to be analyzed. The author needs to take the postive respondent opinion. Why they think that they are satisfied with the current company. Without giving this answer we cann
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 261 350
No. of Characters: 1362 1500
No. of Different Words: 128 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.019 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.218 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.882 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.448 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.283 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.511 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 367, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... conclusion. The investor need to clear this assumptions to fully evaluate the above...
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Line 9, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...avations of his survey not an incomplete conclusion. Also the full question detai...
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Line 9, column 107, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...survey not an incomplete conclusion. Also the full question details of the survey...
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Line 9, column 329, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pany. Without giving this answer we cann
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 261.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39463601533 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99936136242 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 204.123752495 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509578544061 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 22.8473053892 53% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.4031880706 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.0476190476 119.503703932 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.4285714286 23.324526521 53% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227390603994 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657572095036 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604915325271 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129932300781 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616495251978 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.3799401198 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.84 48.3550499002 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.2 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.09 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 11.1389221557 61% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.9071856287 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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