There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest that people seeking longer and healthier lives should consider moving to small communities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author argures that people should leave to small communities rather than bigger ones to live a longer and healthier lives according to the comparison of the people's health between the data from small town Leeville and the large city of Masonton. In these two cities, we are told by the author that there were fewer workers in the Leeville asking for sick leave than those did in the city of Maston. Besides, there was only one physicians to per thousand local people while the number of the doctors in Masonton to a thousand people on average is five times as much as that in Leeville. Moreover, the average age of the residents in Leeville is much higher than the age in Masonton. While these evidence are not convincing as there are some loopholes in them. We should reeamine them carefully.
To begin with, the fewer number of workers who asking for sick leave shows no obvious connnction with the healthier life in Leevile than in Masonton. As we are not aware of the populations of the workers in both of the two places. It is highly possible that threre are much fewer workers in Leeville due to the scale of the town. Thus the totall number of employees detemines the less workers asking for leaves because of their illness. Likewise, we are not aware of the establishments of local companies or industries in both of the two places, either, we could not figure out why the workers asking for sick leave and the their maladies. Maybe the workers with heavy jobs which did not pay for them money on the days when they were absent for works, thus they have to work hard and suffered from the illness at work. On the other hand, the situation of the workers in the Leeville may be totally different while both of these reasons have no connections with the healthier life in the small places for people to live longer and stronger. So there are other evidence reqired to prove the argrument.
In addtion, the average ages of the two places are not compelling to support the argument in that the average age itself shows no informations about the people's health conditions. The much higher average age in Leeville means the most of people living in the place right now are older than those living in the city of Masonton. While how long do they live is still in question. To futher this point of survey, the author should find out the average longevities in both of the two places which could prove the argument.
Finally, the comparison of the numbers of physicians to per thousand people is not convincing. In that we do not know the conditions of the hospitals of the two places. For example, maybe in Leeville there were fewer hospitals while there were full of patients for various disease in each of them. While the case of the Maston maybe different like the doctors are not busy at all. On the other hand, insufficient physicians could not guarantee the people's health when they get sick.
In all ,the author's argument is not compelling, in order to prove the assumption, the author should make wide survey in both of the two places.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 543 350
No. of Characters: 2464 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.827 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.538 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.305 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.801 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.49 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ives according to the comparison of the peoples health between the data from small town...
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Line 1, column 428, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one physician', 'a physician', or simply 'physicians'?
Suggestion: one physician; a physician; physicians
...city of Maston. Besides, there was only one physicians to per thousand local people while the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 687, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s much higher than the age in Masonton. While these evidence are not convincing as th...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...thier life in Leevile than in Masonton. As we are not aware of the populations of ...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...opulations of the workers in both of the two places. It is highly possible that t...
^^
Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... Leeville due to the scale of the town. Thus the totall number of employees detemine...
^^^^
Line 3, column 382, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun workers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...otall number of employees detemines the less workers asking for leaves because of th...
^^^^
Line 3, column 622, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'their'?
Suggestion: the; their
...y the workers asking for sick leave and the their maladies. Maybe the workers with heavy ...
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Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
... itself shows no informations about the peoples health conditions. The much higher aver...
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Line 5, column 231, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...igher average age in Leeville means the most of people living in the place right now are older...
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Line 5, column 329, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n those living in the city of Masonton. While how long do they live is still in quest...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ts for various disease in each of them. While the case of the Maston maybe different ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 449, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ient physicians could not guarantee the peoples health when they get sick. In all ,t...
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Line 9, column 7, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...les health when they get sick. In all ,the authors argument is not compelling, ...
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Line 9, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...alth when they get sick. In all ,the authors argument is not compelling, in order to...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, if, likewise, may, moreover, so, still, thus, while, for example, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 55.5748502994 162% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2517.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 543.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63535911602 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3784100814 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.399631675875 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 790.2 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1266061746 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.875 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147742201449 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423708447674 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462366159643 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0731556048059 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543805502909 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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