"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries. When interviewed for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore, education experts say that long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities. Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument states that athletic competition for children under nine should be discontinued in Parkville because of following advantages. First disadvantage is many young players people suffered injuries. Second disadvantage is long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities. Third disadvantage is youth-league soccer players ,when interviewed for a recent study, reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents. There is no proper evidence to support the argument and the argument is based on assumptions.
Firstly, it assumes that recent study results are accurate and people surveyed are larger enough to represent the general population. There is no evidence that most of the children, who are interviewed, are below the age of nine. The study involves majority of soccer players and assumes that the same applies to other sports. If the recent study involves few percentage of people in Parkville, then it undermines the argument. They should look for alternate way for supporting the argument as the recent study do not involve people from all the sports and there is no evidence that it is large enough to represent majority of the children below the age of nine.
Education experts say that long practice sessions for the sports take away time that could be used for training. Secondly, it assumes that the prediction made by education experts is valid. If many of the sports do not have long practice sessions for the children under nine, then Parkville people are making wrong decision to discontinue organized athletic competition. If all the sports have long practice sessions, then it offers support to the argument.
Thirdly, people in Parkville assume that disadvantages outweigh advantages in the case where more people children below the age of nine participate in organized athletic competition. In the argument, there are no advantages discussed and only disadvantages are discussed. The argument should state all possible advantages and disadvantages before concluding that it is best to discontinue athletic training for children under nine.
There should be some proper evidence supporting the assumptions for strengthening the argument. If the assumptions are invalid, then the argument falls apart.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1900 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.352 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.827 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.684 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.498 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.579 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'practiced'.
Suggestion: practiced
...d injuries. Second disadvantage is long practice sessions for these sports take away tim...
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Line 1, column 378, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...advantage is youth-league soccer players ,when interviewed for a recent study, rep...
^^
Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun percentage seems to be countable; consider using: 'few percentages'.
Suggestion: few percentages
...er sports. If the recent study involves few percentage of people in Parkville, then it undermi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'practiced'.
Suggestion: practiced
... If many of the sports do not have long practice sessions for the children under nine, t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'practiced'.
Suggestion: practiced
...ompetition. If all the sports have long practice sessions, then it offers support to the...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 355.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49577464789 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90674198689 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433802816901 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.02278433 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.684210526 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6842105263 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57894736842 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239959213127 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764927854462 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682134941448 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125419501332 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785495027591 0.0628817314937 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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