Twenty years ago Dr Field a noted anthropologist visited the island of Tertia Using an observation centered approach to studying Tertian culture he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by the | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

Parenthood is complex phenomenon that cannot be estimated or limited to some studies. We encounter many children some trouble, some extremely guilable and some amicable with different parenting experiences. Children have attuned senses in recognizing their parents, their voices, touch and most importantly their scents. This is an inante sense every child is born with. It is one of the reasons why the motherhood is cherished to no ends and the belief of a newborn recognising their mother by touch is not proved wrong. This accute sense a child posses can be a result of rearing them in their initial days or because it is instinctual. In any case, it is not denined that the bond parents create with a child,whether its contrieve or natural, is developed in the nascent stages and resonates through out their childhood. In the same way, the parents too might have a senstive simuli towards the presence of their children. Though it is not proved true, it could be the reason why all the beings,no matter the species, always return back to their nest or home after the end of the day. This desire to belong or to posses something that was nutured by the individuals could be the potential reason.
Though this connection or bond is mesmirizing, it is not rational to forget that apart from this emotional attachment, a child comes with responcsbility. Most newborn parents do not know how to care and foster the children and stuggle immensely. In extreme cases this lack of proper care can result mental and physical disorders in children and in worst cases can even lead to death. Apart from this initial care, children come with a need of attention. Its proven that a newborn needs to held and touched for their sensories to develop efficiently. They also come with keen sense og curiousity to touch and tacte everything they see. If the necessary precautions are not taken this could lead to many disasters. This constant handling of the attention they require, appeasing their curiousity while caring for their health can be taxing on both the parents. This could be the main reason why single parents suffer so much. This could result sleepless nights and burned out appetite. As much as people glorify parenthood it is not with its drawbacks. But the crucial thing note is that, this exahaution can lead to irascible comportment in parents that could scar their children for life.
But all these dire consequences and the burden that comes with the parenthood can be reduced with the help of others. When the whole village tries to divide their time in rearing these children and giving the parents a much needed break, it couls drastically improve the falling mental health of the parents and improve the realtionship between the newborn and the villagers. Though nuturing can sound easy, it is difficult procedure where experience plays the key role. With the elderly in the village patient enough to work through the need of attention and desire to be held by the children and the young adults curious and caring enough to play and concilate the curiousity in these new borns with caution, the burden is reduced quite drastically, leaving the parents to just concentrate on guiding the behaviour of the children. With everyone playing a vital role in raising a child it is easier to assume that they are equally amenable with everyone. Though it could be true in some cases, the beautiful thing about humans is that their affection cannot be studied or measures scientifically.
As already discussed, this urge to return home to your ownby humans drives these little children to their safe spot, that is their parent. Most relations in possesed by humans are convinient relationships. That is relations formed by constantly seeing them everyday. This could be the reason why the emphasis of parents is more than villagers as they see them quite literally everyday. Maybe of they spend more time with the villagers or spend their nights with the villagers, the answer could be different. But since the start of the time due to cultural and pshycreasons it is mandatory for children to stay the night with parents. This does not mean that they are not comfortable with the villagers that helped raise them nor that they are undermining the role the villagers played in their childhood, it is just a result of the bond they share with their parents and their belief of safe and constant safe house in their homes and lives. This point can be proven in the interviews. When asked about their living, the children spent most time talking about their parents who, quite literally, consist of their home space and also the villagers that helped raise them, though not equally but with enough emphasis to understand their role of importance in their life. It is much like how individuals talk about their grand parents. Though they are an important part of their lives, they always come after home or parents, not because they are loved any less but because they are not around constantly.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 712, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , whether
...hat the bond parents create with a child,whether its contrieve or natural, is developed ...
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Line 1, column 796, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...ped in the nascent stages and resonates through out their childhood. In the same way, the p...
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Line 1, column 998, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , no
...t could be the reason why all the beings,no matter the species, always return back ...
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Line 1, column 1029, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
...he beings,no matter the species, always return back to their nest or home after the end of ...
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Line 2, column 345, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'in the worst'.
Suggestion: in the worst
... and physical disorders in children and in worst cases can even lead to death. Apart fro...
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Line 2, column 635, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to touch and tacte everything they see. If the necessary precautions are not taken...
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Line 2, column 924, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ason why single parents suffer so much. This could result sleepless nights and burne...
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Line 2, column 984, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eepless nights and burned out appetite. As much as people glorify parenthood it is...
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Line 4, column 257, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ations formed by constantly seeing them everyday. This could be the reason why the empha...
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Line 4, column 376, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...lagers as they see them quite literally everyday. Maybe of they spend more time with the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, while, apart from, talking about, in any case, in some cases, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 46.0 19.6327345309 234% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 39.0 11.1786427146 349% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 101.0 28.8173652695 350% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 106.0 55.5748502994 191% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4148.0 2260.96107784 183% => OK
No of words: 849.0 441.139720559 192% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88574793875 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.39792595065 4.56307096286 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54303458082 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 359.0 204.123752495 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42285041225 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1251.0 705.55239521 177% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 26.0 4.96107784431 524% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 2.70958083832 406% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 39.0 19.7664670659 197% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.6060294984 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.358974359 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.58974358974 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 8.20758483034 268% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0507203165882 0.218282227539 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0156184941095 0.0743258471296 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0181016125876 0.0701772020484 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0368283835855 0.128457276422 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00537547131234 0.0628817314937 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 171.0 98.500998004 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, while, apart from, talking about, in any case, in some cases, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments