"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twic

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"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
Write a response in which you discuss what question would need to be addressed in order to decide whether the conclusion is responsible

In the excerpt, the author recommends that the best of selling a house is the usage of Adams Realty. To support this recommendation the composer points out to some comparison among two leading real estate firms in his town. This recommendation actually rests on the series of unsubstantiated evidence and is, therefore, unpersuasive as it stands.

A threshold confirmation upon which the recommendation relies is that the quantity of Adams estate agents is two-fold of the Fitch estate agents; as a result, Adams Realty is better than Fitch. However, this confirmation is just based on the vague numeric comparison; since the sizes of the agents do not mention in the article. Maybe, the agents of Fitch Realty possess employees three-times more than Adams Realty. In this case, the whole workforces of Fitch Realty are more than the Adams Realty. Besides, the text posits that some of the agents of Fitch Realty work part-time. While there is no lucid data about the services provided by the agents this comparison is facial. The recommendation would be stronger in a case which addresses to two questions. First, what is the accurate ratio of the work forces in these two firms? Second, what type of service is flourished by the firms?

The proposal fails to provide any justification that the revenue of each agent in Adams Realty is more than Fitch Realty; since the revenue should be calculated based on the pre-agent. On the contrast, the argument solo depicts holistic picture about the earning of these two firms. In a case assumed that Adams Realty owns more workforces, the rate of revenue pre-agent in Adams Realty is less than that proportion in Fitch realty; inasmuch as the number of Adams Realty agents is two-time more than the number of Fitch firm agents; on the other hand, the revenues of these two firms from the home sale are close to each other. Consequently, the argument should cogently address that what the definite is of earn pre-agent, till to be persuasive.

The argument claims without warrant that what held in the ten years ago is incomparable by the recent incident. The text compares the long duration of selling of a house by Fitch firm in the ten years ago with the short span of selling by Adams Realty in a previous year. There is no evidence to support that the demand for the home in the past ten years identical. Maybe, in a decade ago, there was a sufficient supply of homes; thus, the sale of house required long times. Or maybe, the home sold by Adams Realty was more attractive and it was in a good condition; so it sold faster. Either scenario would provide an alternative explanation for this different in ten years. Hence, the author should address this question that entire conditions and features about the demand and home are identical in these ten years until to be valid

To wrap it up, to persuade me that Adams Realty is better than Fitch Realty, the writer must solve the questions about the total workforce of these two firms, the exact ratio of income by each agent; besides, the whole conditions in this ten years about the demand and home's features are similar. As it stands, however, the argument is flawed for the questions which do not answer completely.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...s Realty. Besides, the text posits that some of the agents of Fitch Realty work part-time. ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of service is flourished by the firms? The proposal fails to provide any justif...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'besides', 'consequently', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.283849918434 0.25644967241 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.110929853181 0.15541462614 71% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0734094616639 0.0836205057962 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0424143556281 0.0520304965353 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0114192495922 0.0272364105082 42% => OK
Prepositions: 0.154975530179 0.125424944231 124% => OK
Participles: 0.0179445350734 0.0416121511921 43% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.5881764964 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0163132137031 0.026700313972 61% => OK
Particles: 0.00326264274062 0.001811407834 180% => OK
Determiners: 0.153344208809 0.113004496875 136% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00978792822186 0.0255425247493 38% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0114192495922 0.0127820249294 89% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3228.0 2731.13054187 118% => OK
No of words: 555.0 446.07635468 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81621621622 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.57801047555 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.32972972973 0.378187486979 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.218018018018 0.287650121315 76% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.151351351351 0.208842608468 72% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0846846846847 0.135150697306 63% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5881764964 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 207.018472906 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421621621622 0.469332199767 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.3254676909 52.1807786196 95% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.039408867 120% => OK
Sentence length: 23.125 23.2022227129 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.6708860995 57.7814097925 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.5 141.986410481 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.125 23.2022227129 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.724660767414 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 44.9268018018 51.9672348444 86% => OK
Elegance: 2.77227722772 1.8405768891 151% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381986455775 0.441005458295 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.140211998158 0.135418324435 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0860546068047 0.0829849096947 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.591934311656 0.58762219726 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.146715685119 0.147661913831 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170662364741 0.193483328276 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104693718403 0.0970749176394 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.596891578796 0.42659136922 140% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0788246568649 0.0774707102158 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285807440788 0.312017818177 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655926718643 0.0698173142475 94% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.82512315271 207% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.82389162562 248% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 14.657635468 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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