Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
The author of the issue contends that there are some people who may hold the view that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when selecting a field of study. On the other hand, there are some other people who take the opposite view point and believe that college students should choose a field of study based on the availability of jobs in that field. In what follows, the main reasons posited by both groups are first discussed and then my own position will be delineated.
Those people who argue that college students should give priority to their talents and interests when choosing a field of study, seem to have one plausible reason for their position. The reason is that talents and interests are among the most crucial factors for students to be successful in the particular field of study. In fact, if students are interested in their field of study, they will have a great motivation for being successful and achieving their goals. Therefore, they will do their best and they will try hard to be successful in that particular major of study. Consequently, they will reach at the highest point in their position.
As was stated already, there are some others who believe that considering the availability of jobs should be the most important factor for college students when they choose a field of study. These people seem to have one chief reason to support their claim. Their reason is that these days finding decent and lucrative jobs are very difficult. As a matter of fact, students' main purpose for attending college is to be prepared in order to get a lucrative job in future. Thus, if they cannot find appropriate jobs after graduation, they will be so depressed and disappointed and they will lose their self-confidence.
I should say that this is the first claim with which I generally concur. First of all, from my point of view, the reasons on which the first group relies to support their position are sensible and logical. Furthermore, I have one more reason which makes me to believe that the first claim is true. From my point of view, students who are the best in their field of study, would not have any problem in finding lucrative jobs. Indeed, students who have talents and are interested in their fields of study certainly will be successful and will reach the apex of their major. Hence, they should not be concerned about finding lucrative jobs. Since, all the companies in the country are willing to hire them as the best and the most knowledgeable person in that particular field.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, in fact, as a matter of fact, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 440.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4831498259 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.404545454545 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0604432514 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.6 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489936471568 0.243740707755 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171502206761 0.0831039109588 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164967909014 0.0758088955206 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.366427524704 0.150359130593 244% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137081206661 0.0667264976115 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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