Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty.
The arguments claimed that Adams Realty is a better property agent than Fitch Realty based on several unclear reasons. Those reasons are lack of explanation and filled with unjustified assumptions.
The author claimed that Adams has 40 real estate agents, while Fitch only has 25, which mostly are part-time. It is not stated in the passage regarding either the percentage of Adams realty agent that works full-time or how many years of working experience that Fitch’s and Adam’s reality agents have. Fitch might have lesser agents, but there is a possibility that Fitch’s agents have more experience than Adams’. If this is the case, Fitch’s agents clearly have exceeding Adams’ in terms of quality.
Additionally, the author mentioned that Adams’ revenue last year was twice as high as Fitch and Adams’ had higher average of home sales. First of all, it won’t be shocking that Adams’ had two times higher revenue than Fitch. Recall that Adams has 40 realty agents while Fitch only has 25, which almost half than what Adams has. It is just a common sense that two people can do more things than a single person can. The sales price, in my opinion, does not mean much if not compared to the initial purchase price. The author should also mention the average purchase price, the money that the home owner spent when s/he initially bought the house, of the two realty agents. From the difference between the sales price and the purchase price, the quality of both real estate agents can then be determined.
The final claim that the author made was based on his/her own experience. Ten years ago, Fitch was able to sell his/her house within four months, while a year ago, Adams was able to sell his/her house within one month. While this fact might be true, it was not specified the condition of the houses and the economic condition for each time frame. The price of the house and the location of the house greatly affect the interest of the public to whether or not purchase the house. A house that was located in the middle of nowhere might take longer to be sold compared to the house that was located in the urban area. Additionally, a house that was sold during economic recession might take forever to be sold since most people have bad financial status. However, the author did not mention any of these conditions which make the argument sounds ambiguous.
Most property agents are assessed based on how fast they can sell the properties and how much profit they can give their customers. The author tries to show that Adams is a better property agent than Fitch based on these facts. However, the author lacks more information and details that are needed to convince the readers.
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'first of all', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.274401473297 0.25644967241 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.156537753223 0.15541462614 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0681399631676 0.0836205057962 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0552486187845 0.0520304965353 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0165745856354 0.0272364105082 61% => OK
Prepositions: 0.097605893186 0.125424944231 78% => OK
Participles: 0.0386740331492 0.0416121511921 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.39656533228 2.79052419416 86% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0165745856354 0.026700313972 62% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.104972375691 0.113004496875 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0184162062615 0.0255425247493 72% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0257826887661 0.0127820249294 202% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2744.0 2731.13054187 100% => OK
No of words: 466.0 446.07635468 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.88841201717 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334763948498 0.378187486979 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.203862660944 0.287650121315 71% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.1330472103 0.208842608468 64% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0836909871245 0.135150697306 62% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39656533228 2.79052419416 86% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 207.018472906 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476394849785 0.469332199767 102% => OK
Word variations: 53.9248885633 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.039408867 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.2608695652 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.6005671021 57.7814097925 49% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.304347826 141.986410481 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2608695652 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.478260869565 0.724660767414 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.58251231527 0% => OK
Readability: 40.6471356596 51.9672348444 78% => OK
Elegance: 1.79838709677 1.8405768891 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38643576505 0.441005458295 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.16928524865 0.135418324435 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.124472402112 0.0829849096947 150% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.52984730994 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.143438877437 0.147661913831 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145953049625 0.193483328276 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107665951986 0.0970749176394 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.372244125704 0.42659136922 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.112395162462 0.0774707102158 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257075390861 0.312017818177 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132175764206 0.0698173142475 189% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.82512315271 228% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 11.0 2.82389162562 390% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 20.0 14.657635468 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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