"Two years ago Nova High School began to use interactive computer instruction in three academic subjects. The school dropout rate declined immediately, and last year's graduates have reported some impressive achievements in college. In future budgets the school board should use a greater portion of the available funds to buy more computers, and all schools in the district should adopt interactive computer instruction throughout the curriculum."
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
The school board of Nova High School decide that started to use interactive computer instruction in three academic subjects because in the last year of college graduates have reported some impressive achievements because of computer program. So, school board to decide that all schools in the district should adopt interactive computer instruction throughout the curriculum. But this argument has many loopholes to evaluate the study program.
The school board wants that all school in the district should consider computer program as part of student annually portion. So, that success ratio is arise and decrease the number whose try to leave the school. But Because extra three subject of computer instruction add so that burden on student is increase. And average student goes on under pressure and it will create an adverse effect on the student activity and studies.
Despite the student interest in the field of computer school adopt all subject and makes mandatory. If some student interest has an art, automobile, literature or any other areas, because of tremendous syllabus those students are not give sufficient time for own interest. After complete time of school some student do many extra activity and goes many academies like dance, music or cricket are becoming worthless. Because extra curriculum work stultifies the student timetable and also create adverse effect on marks. Because magnum opus is to make disparage some subject. So, instead of getting great achievement student may be suffering from lower rank.
In the argument for decide to bring out interactive computer instruction all school required sufficient computer labs and instruments which provide effective knowledge. For requirement of numerous computer school gradually increase the school budget. So that school makes increment in the student fees structure. Those student’s parents are not able to pay extra fees this fees increment inappropriate and that student may not be continuing their curriculum work. It also adversely affects those students who goes to some extra activity classes because arise in the school payment they may not be go last long and it ruin student career whose interested in the other activity rather that study.
For the increments in the school result and get more impressive achievement, school board should put some extra time on student counseling and encourage to student for career goals by to absolve arrange doubting session, number of seminars and industrial visit. Extra work never helps to get more result it always pressurizes the student.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 2131 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.288 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.574 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.313 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'arisen'.
Suggestion: arisen
...ally portion. So, that success ratio is arise and decrease the number whose try to le...
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Line 5, column 521, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nd also create adverse effect on marks. Because magnum opus is to make disparage some s...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 252, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...l gradually increase the school budget. So that school makes increment in the student f...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 623, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ruins'?
Suggestion: ruins
...ent they may not be go last long and it ruin student career whose interested in the ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 340, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sult it always pressurizes the student.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2183.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 403.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41687344913 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64723683579 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493796526055 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3029510227 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.15 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.15 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.1 5.70786347227 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219545458849 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816064558635 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105412306298 0.0701772020484 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156540166178 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123027809966 0.0628817314937 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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