Vandalism in Carlton County
The author of the letter recommends that county government should take strict measures to reduce the number of out-of-state migrants in order to prevent further destruction of public property and restore civic order. These conclusion is based on out-of-state migrants are the main cause of vandalism in Carlton County. However, before this recommendation be properly evaluated, three questions must be answered.
Firstly, is the rate of increase of out-of-state migrants proportional to rate of increase of vandalism incidences? The recommender presumes that increase in vandalism incidences is directly related to out-of-state migrants which have increased at the same rate as the rate of incidences.However, it is possible that in year 1 the vandalism incidences were higher than that of year 2. Simultaneously, the out-of-state migrants were lower in year 1 as compared to year 2. Perhaps, the vice versa of above scenarios is also possible. therefore, if above is true, the argument doesn't hold water.
Secondly, Are out-of-state migrants the only ones' responsible for property damage in the Carlton County?The recommender presumes that out-of-state migrants are the only ones who are responsible for property damage. It is likely that native people could also be responsible for vandalism incidences. Perhaps, it might be true that there might be some riots in the county for native people rights and due to which there is property damage in the county. Therefore, more evidence is needed in order to evaluate the argument. As it stands, argument is flawed.
Thirdly, will taking up strict measures to reduce out-of-state migrants necessarily mean property damage is prevented and civic order will be restored? What if there is another factor at play here which causes vandalism incidences? Perhaps, if the influx of out-of-state migrants is hindered, the economy of Carlton town will go into recession. It is likely that the migrants bring in a considerable part of revenue for Carlton county purveyors. As a result, reducing the influx of migrant might hamper the economy of Carlton town.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stand now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer three questions above and offer more evidence (perhaps in form of a systematic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluated the feasibility of the proposed recommendation works.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 2015 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.193 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.953 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.67 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this conclusion' or 'These conclusions'?
Suggestion: This conclusion; These conclusions
...ublic property and restore civic order. These conclusion is based on out-of-state migrants are t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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..., three questions must be answered. Firstly, is the rate of increase of out-...
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...te of increase of vandalism incidences?.The recommender presumes that increase in v...
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Suggestion: However
...the same rate as the rate of incidences.However, it is possible that in year 1 the vand...
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...sa of above sceanrios is also possible. therefore, if above is true, the argument doesnt ...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...erefore, if above is true, the argument doesnt hold water. Secondly, Are out-o...
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...rue, the argument doesnt hold water. Secondly, Are out-of-state migrants the ...
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...r property damage in the Carlton County?The recommender presumes that out-of-state ...
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.... As it stands, argument is flawed. Thirdly, will taking up strict measures ...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'take'
Suggestion: take
...ument is flawed. Thirdly, will taking up strict measures to reduce out-of-sta...
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...hamper the economy of Carlton town. In conclusion, the argument, as it stand...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45430809399 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13297649597 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469973890339 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.5698884522 57.8364921388 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.947368421 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1578947368 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213883136463 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064644911371 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738820062743 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124647866955 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742364261973 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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