Scientists and other researchers should focus their research on areas that are likely to benefit the greatest number of people.
Scientists and researchers are the ones who are responsible for major breakthroughs, be it in Physics, Chemistry, Biology, or any other domains. Hence, they are one of the most important assets to the country. Universities and countries invest huge amounts of money in research which helps a large number of people. Most of the scientists are interested in research which puts a significant impact on the world and which may help make the world a better place to live in. Therefore, in my opinion, I mostly agree with the recommendation that scientists and researchers should work on those areas which will eventually help a large number of people based on two reasons.
To Begin, Scientists who have studied medicine can greatly impact the world because they can find the cures for novel diseases. For instance, in 2020, a novel strain of SARS virus was spread in China which immediately spread throughout the world. Moreover, disease had no cure and it was rampant all over the world. It was even designated as a pandemic level threat by the World Health Organization. As a result, millions of people were infected and, thousands were dead. Due to which scientist were assigned with the task of finding a vaccine or cure for the disease in the shortest time possible. Hence, once scientists find a potent cure for the disease which can also be called as an "Elixir of Life", millions of peoples' life will be saved. Thus, scientists should only focus on those areas which add value to the society and help a large group of people.
However, the only working on those areas which impact the human race is not always a good choice, but focussing on those areas which will in future (2-3 decades after) will put a significant impact on the human race is always a better choice. For example, the owner of Tesla (Automaker) - Elon Musk has inaugurated two companies - The Boring company & Space X. The scientist of the latter are working on ways in which we can connect various countries all over the world with an underground tunnel. If the scientists find a way to make this project successful, it will give a new dimension to the way we transit from one to another. Moreover, the Space X company, which has there scientists researching for ways to make travel to Mars accessible. Consequently, they also have a vision which is one step farther than we can imagine - They want to make the interplant travelling a budget friendly experience. Thus, though scientists and research do not focus on areas which would help a large number of people in the short term, working in pioneering areas which would be game changer in the long run is a necessary aspect that every scientists must look for.
Of course, some would argue that scientists should not be mandate to focus on research areas which would benefit most a large number of people. However, that is exception not a rule. Scientists have a free will to research about the areas that they are interested in, but they should also focus on the areas which add value to the society. In conclusion, Scientists and other researchers should their research on areas that are likely to help a large number of people or work on those areas which will have a significant impact in the long run.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...mounts of money in research which helps a large number of people. Most of the scientists are inte...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... those areas which will eventually help a large number of people based on two reasons. To Beg...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...research areas which would benefit most a large number of people. However, that is exception not ...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...search on areas that are likely to help a large number of people or work on those areas which wil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.3162921348 230% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2688.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 561.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79144385027 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64496323737 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440285204991 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 817.2 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.330204856 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 5.21951772744 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327084492792 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10255785908 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123809975264 0.0758088955206 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256245077813 0.150359130593 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.164696896408 0.0667264976115 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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