Nature’s Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature’s Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville’s schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
The argument that Nature’s way will prove to be very successful because it is profitable in most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives. The conclusion is not entirely and logically convincing because it is based on a few unproven assumptions.
Firstly, the argument states that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time high. Consequently, assuming that due to demand the Nature’s way products will be successful. Perhaps the sales in earlier years were 10000 running shoes per year, now those are 10500 running shoes per year. Moreover, maybe there is a discount on prices of health-related products leading to record-breaking sales. Does that necessarily mean that it will provide significant profit to Nature’s way? Therefore, until and unless a systematic research study is not taken into consideration, this conclusion doesn’t hold water.
Secondly, the argument states that local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Maybe the club has offered some kind of discount resulting in Health clubs teeming with members. Moreover, even if the health club members have increased, does it mean that every member will buy health-related products and food from Nature’s way only? Perhaps, there is a competitor who supplies the same quality of products as Nature’s ways at a cheaper rate. Therefore, if above is true, the conclusion does not hold water.
Thirdly, it is assumed that Plainsville is a place teeming with health conscious residents. As a result, the Nature’s way will be successful and profitable. It is an unwarranted assumption that Plainesville has a very huge population and a potential market for health related products. Perhaps, the population is in 10,000s as for being in 100,000s. Maybe, not all residents of Plainesville are health conscious. Supposedly, only 7000 of total are interested in health related products. Moreover, even if 7000 are interested they will have alternatives sources other than nature’s way for their health related needs. If the above scenario holds merit, the conclusion is significantly weakened.
Fourthly, it is assumed that school children are potential customers which will engender success and bring in profits. Perhaps, there is only one school in Plainsvile, consisting only 300-400 students. Will such a meagre quantity lead to success and eventual profits in future? Although, if there are many schools consisting of 1000- 2000 students each. The conclusion might be plausible. Until and unless a new evidence is provided, the conclusion is flawed.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stand now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to offer more evidence (perhaps in form of a systematic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the feasibility of the argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Sentence: Therefore, until and unless a systematic research study is not taken into consideration, this conclusion doesn't hold water.
Description: The tag a conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by and
Suggestion: Refer to until and and
Description: A Single quote is not usually followed by an adjective, superlative
Suggestion: Refer to ' and t
Sentence: Thirdly, it is assumed that Plainsville is a place teeming with health conscious residents.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to health and conscious
Sentence: Moreover, even if 7000 are interested they will have alternatives sources other than nature's way for their health related needs.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to alternatives and sources
Sentence: Until and unless a new evidence is provided, the conclusion is flawed.
Description: The tag a conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by and
Suggestion: Refer to Until and and
Sentence: Firstly, the argument states that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time high.
Error: all-time Suggestion: all time
Sentence: Moreover, maybe there is a discount on prices of health-related products leading to record-breaking sales.
Error: health-related Suggestion: health related
Error: record-breaking Suggestion: record breaking
Sentence: Therefore, until and unless a systematic research study is not taken into consideration, this conclusion doesn't hold water.
Error: doesn Suggestion: does
Sentence: Moreover, even if the health club members have increased, does it mean that every member will buy health-related products and food from Nature's way only?
Error: health-related Suggestion: health related
Sentence: It is an unwarranted assumption that Plainesville has a very huge population and a potential market for health related products.
Error: unwarranted Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Will such a meagre quantity lead to success and eventual profits in future?
Error: meagre Suggestion: meager
Sentence: In conclusion, the argument, as it stand now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions.
Error: unwarranted Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
Read a good grammar book.
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
Double check spelling errors.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2377 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.145 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.836 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 148 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 109 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.402 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.263 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.486 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.052 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, as for, in conclusion, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2473.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 459.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38779956427 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97396553862 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505446623094 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 2.70958083832 369% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1285319984 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.275862069 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8275862069 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06896551724 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294599148434 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755510825769 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836547887801 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147618715032 0.128457276422 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0807886653602 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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