Vandalism in Carlton County
In the letter by the citizen of Carlton County to the author, it is claimed that the cause of increased vandalism in the Carlton County over the past two years is out of state migrants. This is concluded based on the migrant’s trend that has also increased over the past few years. Therefore it is recommended by the citizen that government should take strict measure to control out of state migrants. However, before this statement can be properly evaluated, three question must be answered.
Firstly, is there any strong relation between migrants and vandalism that could act as testimony for the increased vandalism? Perhaps it is possible that all the migrants migrated to join ones profession and doesn’t have anything to do with vandalism. For example if all migrants in Carlton County are working as engineers, doctors, teacher etc. And all the victims of vandalism belongs to the native state (Carlton County) and are mostly jobless who indulge and do such activities as their imperative source of income. Therefore without considering all other aspects, the arguer makes unfair assumption that the large migrant population is responsible of increased vandalism.
Secondly, it is noted that vandalism has been increased over the past two years, so what has actually changed in past two years apart from migrant’s population that could be responsible for such increased vandalism? Perhaps it is possible that change in the political scenario might be responsible. For example it is possible that election might have happen two years before and the newly elected political party did nothing for the betterment of their citizen and might be alleged for the corruption as well poor handling of the state and its fellow citizens which aggravated the frustration of citizens that ultimately leads to vandalism in state. If above is true, then argument doesn’t hold water.
Thirdly, what is the purpose of migrants to the Carlton County state? Perhaps it is possible that almost all the migrants belong to the old class citizen that could only enjoy each day of their life without bothering what is happening all around. For example it is possible that increased in migrants is because of multitude of old people who came to Carlton County to spend their retirement life in this state in past two years. Therefore, considering this aspect the arguer makes unwarranted assumption.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stand now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to offer more evidence (perhaps in the form of a systematic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the feasibility of the argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 441 350
No. of Characters: 2199 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.583 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.986 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.626 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.729 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.396 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: OUT_OF_PLACE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'out-of-state'?
Suggestion: out-of-state
...rlton County over the past two years is out of state migrants. This is concluded based on th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...also increased over the past few years. Therefore it is recommended by the citizen that g...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 380, Rule ID: OUT_OF_PLACE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'out-of-state'?
Suggestion: out-of-state
...t should take strict measure to control out of state migrants. However, before this statemen...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 188, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... that all the migrants migrated to join ones profession and doesn’t have anything to...
^^^^
Line 2, column 518, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...s as their imperative source of income. Therefore without considering all other aspects, ...
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Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
...it is possible that election might have happen two years before and the newly elected ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, apart from, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13439635535 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72788340205 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469248291572 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.0259799963 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.631578947 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1052631579 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 5.70786347227 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269900324312 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940856740612 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138450865725 0.0701772020484 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15245214283 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102214807111 0.0628817314937 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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