As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position
Knowledge, the most pivotal characteristics of human evolution. As human being evolved, along with evolved knowledge and wisdom. Knowledge is gained by persistent and relentless efforts. Therefore, knowledge of any human being describes how intellectual and cerebral he is. In the statement it is stated as one who indulges more into the knowledge of any field, more it becomes arcane and convoluted and less comprehensible. I partially agree with such statement because if someone disinters deeper into his respective field of study, findings, research etc. The more knowledgeable he becomes and would have broader and very fathom knowledge but, with such knowledge comes more questions, doubts, mysterious, complexity etc.
For example, the scientist who study the cosmology and about the universe has fathom knowledge and understanding of his field but it also leads to him counter with mystery of universe such as the findings of testimony of 'How the universe began', how the 'Big Bang' started. The scientist who relentlessly indulged into such field of study has a very staunch knowledge about the universe but also has many questions, mysterious, complexity that needs to be understand and solve. Therefore, clearly if someone indulges into his respective field of study, obviously become master about it but at the same time he has various, confusions, questions, doubts, all going inside his judicious mind.
Furthermore, the previous example reveals that more you are involved to get knowledge and understanding of any subject the more you reach to the complexity of respective subject. But that does not mean that it leads to more incomprehensibility. Because as you understand and gain fathom knowledgeable about particular domain the more erudite you become in such field of study. Thus, at such stage one has complete picture of particular field that how it initially started and how much study and researched have been carried out to achieve this stage and what are its further advancement and future. For example, the study of human evolution, there have been various experiments conducted out to come at the conclusion that human species evolved from apes, also called as 'Darwin's Concept' and various research and findings are still being carried which concluded that human beings are constantly evolving and therefore, millions years from now, human being would have been evolved into different sub species of human, ‘with shorter legs and longer vertebrate’. This example, shows the scientist who has deep knowledge and understanding of biology and zoology has clear and comprehensible understanding of the basics of his domain such as, from where it has started and what is it future scope.
In sum , As one who disinter into knowledge would ultimately lead to the complexity of the subject but at the same time those complex and mysterious things persuade him for more findings, broader knowledge, new research that leads to him to more comprehensibility of the subject.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 7, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 14.8657303371 209% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2521.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 475.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30736842105 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96117674603 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444210526316 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 784.8 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 101.037695525 60.3974514979 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.294117647 118.986275619 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9411764706 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47058823529 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239037967498 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913581403329 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891664590805 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156701473846 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630734000562 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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