The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The vice president of human resources at Climpson according to some illogical assumptions, purposed the installation of electronic monitoring software, to control the use of the internet by the employees in their workstations. In the proposal, not only some surmises are shaky, but also the conclusion conducted according to these surmises are misleading too. In what follows, these errors will be discussed.
The first problem of the proposal is the unstated hypothesis that claims there is an inverse relationship between the productivity of workers and their internet use. By the internet usage of employees, their level of productivity will be decreased. This assumption is faint since there are other factors such as employees' status of education or the cooperation network between the workers which enhance productivity and are crucial in the enhancement of productivity. For instance, there is the possibility that the employees use the internet network for the communication and sharing the ideas about the issue related to the company with their coworkers; in this situation, by the prohibition of internet use by the employees, their interconnection will be unconnected. On the other hand, if they had this interaction through the internet, they can exchange their thoughts and ideas and present a unique or efficient solution for issues in the company and increase its productivity. Therefore, forbidding the internet will not increase productivity.
Another issue of the prompt is the consideration of the hypothesis that punishment will reduce hours spend on the personal and recreational tasks by employees. Indeed, the punishment shows counteract reaction, as an individual is punished for his function, he is more eager to repeat the same action, this eagerness increases as the punishment are unfair. Consequently, there is a possibility that this punishment for internet usage, incites the employees to use the internet more than the past. Even the company blocks the internet access from the workstation, the workers can use their cellphone and its internet for their personal and amusement tasks. In this condition, the castigation provokes the employees to bypass the law and take some action against the company's rule. In this condition, the presumption of the establishment of a good work ethic in the company is also faint too. Thus, the punishment will not be beneficial for the prohibition of internet use and encouragement for the organization of work ethic.
Finally, the president assumed that this action will decline the wasted times by the employees. Even by considering that this proposed plan will work as the president assumed, there are no warranties that it will reduce the wasted hours. Since the internet in some situations eases life and does some time-consuming works in the fastest and easiest way. For example, the online payment of the bill is one of the actions which is done in the few minutes; while, the direct payment through the banks is time-consuming. In this scenario, the employees, who are prohibited to use the internet from their workstation, have to take a period off from the company to do the payment through the bank. As a result, the consumed period will be longer than which would be spent on the internet.
To wrap it up, in the reflection of aforementioned facts, one can easily realize that the president advice can the accepted if the relationship between the productivity and internet usage, punishment and decrement of internet use, and saving time by the decrement of internet use is comprehensively and cogently is clarified.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 574 350
No. of Characters: 2961 1500
No. of Different Words: 241 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.895 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.159 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.99 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 207 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 179 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 137 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 94 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.343 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.347 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 39.0 16.3942115768 238% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3047.0 2260.96107784 135% => OK
No of words: 579.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26252158895 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90534594407 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08010158138 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428324697755 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 948.6 705.55239521 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.22255489022 308% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.4304234288 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.47826087 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1739130435 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04347826087 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0781061350292 0.218282227539 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0287059858385 0.0743258471296 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452332743981 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0547969212459 0.128457276422 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431034977506 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 98.500998004 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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