We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, it stands to reason that our director will expect to be able to shoot take after take, without concern for how much time is being spent on any one scene. In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If we don’t get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure.
The given argument suggests that the funding of the movie Working Title should be increased by 10 percent because the director who has previous experience of shooting commercials is notoriously wasteful. The movie producer also states that if they fail to get the 10 percent increase in funding, the movie is assured to fail. The given argument has some stated or unstated presumptions which best sound dubious and without which we can not conclude that the failure of the movie is inevitable.
Firstly, it is assumed that the advertising business is notoriously wasteful. Which in turn assumes that the first time director for the movie, who has previous experience of shooting commericals for a shampoo company will take some shoot take after take. It could have been the case that since commercials are of short length, the director would know how to extract the best out of actors using few shoot takes. It is not necessary that since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, the director is also the same. There is no proof regarding the wasteful nature of advertising company which makes the argument look feeble. It is assumed that the director would not have any concern regarding how much time is sent on any one scene. This is a very big assumption made by the movie producer and he has not stated any evidence which would support this. Hence, without any evidence the argument does not hold good.
Secondly, the movie producer states that they have saved money by hiring naive assistant producers and directors. He or she goes on to say that this saved money would go to the actors and crew for the overtime of the extra hours caused due to naive assistant directors and producers. It is assumed that the actors would want extra money for the overtime done by them. It is not necessary that all actors would want extra time for the overtimethey do. Some might even do the work for no charge because of the enthusiasm and there loyalty, faithfullness devoted to their work. The crew might also experience the same thing. It is further assumed that since the assistant directors and producers are naive, they would take extra time to arrange things. This could be proven wrong. It is very much possible that the assistant directors and producers reach the set before time and ensure that no delay in work or overtime is caused by them.
Finally, it is assumed that if the movie does not get 10 percent increase in funding, it is going to fail. There is no support provided that the movie would fail if it does not get the 10 percent increase in funding. The argument fails to produce support or evidence for the presumptions made by the movie produer in his or her memo. To further evaluate, we would need answer to few questions. Why is the advertising business assumed notoriously wasteful? and why is it assumed that the director will take shoot after the take? Why would the director not have any concern for time spent on one scene? Why would the newly hired naive assistant director and producer make the crew and actors waiting to arrange things? Without this funding, Why is the movie's failure inevitable?
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 542 350
No. of Characters: 2546 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.825 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.697 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.399 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.315 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.393 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.455 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.161 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Working Title should be increased by 10 percent because the director who has pre...
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Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o states that if they fail to get the 10 percent increase in funding, the movie i...
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Line 1, column 329, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... funding, the movie is assured to fail. The given argument has some stated or unsta...
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Line 2, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... after take. It could have been the case that since commercials are of short leng...
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Line 4, column 57, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ssumed that if the movie does not get 10 percent increase in funding, it is going...
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Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vie would fail if it does not get the 10 percent increase in funding. The argumen...
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Line 4, column 378, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... further evaluate, we would need answer to few questions. Why is the advertising b...
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Line 4, column 458, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
... business assumed notoriously wasteful? and why is it assumed that the director wil...
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Line 4, column 752, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'movies'' or 'movie's'?
Suggestion: movies'; movie's
...hings? Without this funding, Why is the movies failure inevitable?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2593.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 542.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78413284133 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45591638824 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.374538745387 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 815.4 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 4.96107784431 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1891725238 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4137931034 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6896551724 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.93103448276 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243523355034 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739071002312 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772389120831 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159435931229 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0747994897027 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.32208582834 82% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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