The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group:“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is es

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The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group:

“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”

Youngtown is home to 300 bird species and hence,it attracts tourists who specially come here to see it's magnificent bird population.The smith corporation plans to buy a piece of land and plans to build a hotel.They have promised that they would ensure preservation of the sanctuary.The petition is obscure and needs to answer some questions.
The smith corporation plans to build a small hotel on the land which is now a part of youngtown wildlife preserve.Although smith corporation ensures that they would not do any harm to the sanctuary,their plans do not bolster it.If the smith corporation plans to build a hotel,it would have to clear the area which would primarily involve deforestation.This could not only involve cutting of trees but also decimation of the birds habitat.This could cause a decline in the birds population and also result in the birds migration. This in turn could have a negative impact on the tourism and would do more harm than good to the youngtown community.
The smith corporation would develop only a small amount of land and make a small hotel.This hotel could be a benefit for the tourists as they would get to witness the birds right from the hotel and they would be able to spend maximum time with the birds which their primary motive is for visiting youngtown.This can lead to an increase in the tourism and would benefit the youngtown community more.
The smith corporation has ensured preservation of the sanctuary and hence there is no evidence that it would definitely harm the sanctuary.
The environmental protection group should answer why smith corporation would definitely do more harm than good to the sanctuary?The small hotel proposed to be built by the smith corporation could allow tourists to live near the sanctuary which the tourists would like and hence it could lead to an increase in tourism which would benefit the company more.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 315.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00634920635 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96106250465 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450793650794 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 22.8473053892 228% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 144.407313604 57.8364921388 250% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 262.833333333 119.503703932 220% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.5 23.324526521 225% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21085911723 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114445235418 0.0743258471296 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287067093058 0.0701772020484 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124199140185 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262706233209 0.0628817314937 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.4 14.3799401198 197% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.16 48.3550499002 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.4 12.197005988 184% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.67 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 12.3882235529 242% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.8 11.1389221557 205% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 23.0 11.9071856287 193% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 328 350
No. of Characters: 1551 1500
No. of Different Words: 134 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.256 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.729 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.536 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 81 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 46.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 28.433 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.527 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.194 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5