"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
The writer of the argument recommends that the college should admit only female in order to get support from others; however, this recommendation cannot be accepted because it relies on a series of unproven assumptions that I will delve into them below.
The first problem with the argument is that it depends on unproven statics. The administrative staff of Grove college points out that eighty percent of the students in a survey wanted the school to remain all-female education. The results of survey may be not authentic because we do not know the population of the sample. perhaps the population of the sample is not significant in size and is not representative of the whole students. In other words, maybe a specific students with specific opinions and believes participate in the survey. In addition, it is likely that the methodology of information gathering is not impartial and fair and the questionnaire have particular orientation which lead to this result. Moreover, the writer mentions that over half of the alumnae opposed co-education. we do not know how many alumnae participated in the survey, perhaps not all alumnae have involved in survey. In addition, perhaps the survey is not fair in asking questions. For example, maybe the questionnaire has asked whether alumnae agree that males formed the majority of the school or not.
The mere fact that by admitting men to college, college will lose the supporting of alumnae cannot suffice to show that enrolling men is not logical. other factors can lead to losing alumna's support such as lack of equity between men and women in college or the ratio of the women to men. In order to attract graduates’ attention, college should hold an entrance exam and choose students based on it and not admit men without any indices and standards. On the other hand, competitive atmosphere among women and men can be positive in school’s background and lead to obtaining many honors for the college such as students’ acceptance in universities entrance exams, therefore, encourages supporters to invest more on this college.
To sum up, the writer's conclusion cannot be taken to be correct because, as it was shown in the body paragraphs above, it depends on a number of assumptions each of which is questionable and challenging. The writer can strengthen his assertion by changing states referred to the mentioned solutions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 393 350
No. of Characters: 1952 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.452 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.967 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.808 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.268 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.55 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...is that it depends on unproven statics. The administrative staff of Grove college p...
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Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... school to remain all-female education. The results of survey may be not authentic ...
^^^
Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
... not know the population of the sample. perhaps the population of the sample is not sig...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 368, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: significant
...aps the population of the sample is not significant in size and is not representative of the whole ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 470, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'student'?
Suggestion: student
...dents. In other words, maybe a specific students with specific opinions and believes par...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 799, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...lf of the alumnae opposed co-education. we do not know how many alumnae participat...
^^
Line 9, column 151, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Other
...show that enrolling men is not logical. other factors can lead to losing alumnas supp...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 16, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...re on this college. To sum up, the writers conclusion cannot be taken to be correc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition, such as, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 393.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13486005089 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96368304307 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516539440204 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9877726872 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.705882353 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1176470588 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94117647059 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110505852677 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0312114385995 0.0743258471296 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388124732932 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0637530744895 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460466823147 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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