"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
A cursory look at the statement above that Monarch Books should open a cafe in its store to attract more customers seems logical. However, a critical exegesis of the writers statements and its presumptions shows that, there is a plethora of questions that are craving for answers for the statement to be logical. Ergo, the writer's claim in the statement above is logically flawed and inconvincing.
Firstly, the claim that Monarch Books should open a cafe in its store comes with many considerations. One is the financial and technical capability, another is the need of the people patronizing the store. Is there a need for a cafe in this area? What is the need of the people patronizing the store? Has there been any survey of the customers which indicates the need for a cafe? Or there is an op-ed pages in the newspaper indicating a cafe in this store? What is the financial strength as well as the technical capability of the store? We have no inkling about the customer's need for a cafe These and many more questions are needed to be answered for the writer's claim to be cogent and logical. May be the customer prefer shopping for books alone in this store or prefer a cafe we just dont know.
Additionally, Discontinuing the children book section for the cafe as suggested by the writer might come with grave consequences. The children section might be the prime section that make the store thrive in terms of sales. What is the prove the writer has in terms of supporting this suggestion? What is the revenue from this section when compared to other section?- an indication of whether to scrap this section for a cafe. More so, the writer claimed that there is a significant decline in population of children under age ten in the area, but how are we to believe this claim. the decrease might be inconsequencial may be a decrease of less than 1 pecent. The writer has to prove this will unassailable evidence. After all, ''he who assert must prove'' says an hoary legal maxim. Besides, children goes beyond ten years, what will happen to the books of other children that are not in this category?
Furthermore, the writer presupposes that opening this cafe will attract more customers. What is his valid evidence for this? Has he/she conducted a research on this? before making this asseertion. An answer to this question remains a desideratum. Also, the writer advises Monarch Books to engage in this action in order to compete with Regal Books. Business is not about competition. It is about customers need and forcast for good return. If Regal Books open a cafe recently, what is their current sales from the cafe? does it worth opening another in this area? Is it thriving? These and many more questions are supposed to be answered. As it stands presently, this suggestion is not to be considered valid as chritopher Hitchen says '' That which can be asserted without evidence can be dismissed without evidence.
Ultimately, The writer is expected to provide answers to the questions asked above if he want his suggestions to be considered for decision making. If these questions are not answered, relying on the writers assumption to open a cafe at Monarch Book will result not in profit but an unpropitious prognostication.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 902
No. of Sentences: 34 15
No. of Words: 558 350
No. of Characters: 2617 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.86 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.69 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.646 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.412 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.081 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.382 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.266 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.433 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 704, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ers claim to be cogent and logical. May be the customer prefer shopping for books ...
^^
Line 3, column 791, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... in this store or prefer a cafe we just dont know. Additionally, Discontinuing the...
^^^^
Line 5, column 233, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...store thrive in terms of sales. What is the prove the writer has in terms of supporting t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 583, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
..., but how are we to believe this claim. the decrease might be inconsequencial may b...
^^^
Line 5, column 760, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...fter all, he who assert must prove says an hoary legal maxim. Besides, children g...
^^
Line 5, column 799, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... an hoary legal maxim. Besides, children goes beyond ten years, what will happen ...
^^
Line 7, column 147, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...evidence for this? Has he/she conducted a research on this? before making this asseertion....
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Before
...as he/she conducted a research on this? before making this asseertion. An answer to th...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...as he/she conducted a research on this? before making this asseertion. An answer to th...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 521, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Does
...t is their current sales from the cafe? does it worth opening another in this area? ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 736, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sidered valid as chritopher Hitchen says That which can be asserted without evide...
^^
Line 9, column 90, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...wers to the questions asked above if he want his suggestions to be considered for de...
^^^^
Line 9, column 201, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...stions are not answered, relying on the writers assumption to open a cafe at Monarch Bo...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, well, after all, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2685.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 557.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82046678636 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73918855107 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421903052065 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 847.8 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 19.7664670659 182% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.1033001061 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.5833333333 119.503703932 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4722222222 23.324526521 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08333333333 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 21.0 4.67664670659 449% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217435618208 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609968170424 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641880313674 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146842270562 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529203004004 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.3799401198 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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