"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author proposes to open a cafe in the Monarch book store based on various assumptions in support of the argument. While the idea could be good, further analysis of the evidence and testing of assumptions is required before arriving at any conclusion.
To start with, the author assumes that since the Monarch book store has been in business for over twenty years, opening a cafe would also have good business. This is an unwarranted assumption as there is no causal relationship between book readers and cafe goers. We must question whether the Monarch store is frequented for the books or for the cafe? It can be the case that visitors like the peaceful and quite store, and opening a cafe would drive them away.
In order to make space for the cafe, it is proposed that children's book section can be discontinued as it may become less popular in the future because a national census projected reduction in number of population below ten years. This assumption has multiple flaws in it. Firstly, it is not known how famous is the children's section in the store? What would happen if it is the most famous section and gets discontinued? Secondly, the author does not mention who are the main visitors of this section. It can be that adults are more frequent to the section in-order to read and borrow books for their kids at home. If that is the case then discontinuing the section might mean lot of readers may stop coming to the store. Therefore, without knowing how popular the section is, and amongst which population it cannot be assumed that discontinuing it would have no impact on the store.
Finally, the author makes a direct comparison between the Monarch store and Regal Books. Citing the fact that since Regal book has opened a cafe, the Monarch store must do the same. This statement is weak and is not supported by any facts. Can the two stores be compared with each other? There can be plethora of other factors that act in favor of opening a cafe in Regal books store, like its location, type of visitors etc. And the author presents no such comparable facts. Also, the author does not mention that Regal books are in profit after opening the cafe. It could be that opening a cafe reduced their number of customers.
In conclusion, the idea to open a cafe in Monarch store is based on assumptions and evidence which is not complete. Though, the author cites history of the store and studies in support to the claim that opening a cafe might work and there is possibility to open it in current store. But it is not relevant to lend credible support and suffers from numerous gaps that need to be addressed before any conclusion regarding opening a cafe can be made.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 617, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nd borrow books for their kids at home. If that is the case then discontinuing the...
^^
Line 9, column 117, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ons and evidence which is not complete. Though, the author cites history of the ...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'while', 'in conclusion', 'to start with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243243243243 0.25644967241 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.183397683398 0.15541462614 118% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0559845559846 0.0836205057962 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0366795366795 0.0520304965353 70% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0328185328185 0.0272364105082 120% => OK
Prepositions: 0.131274131274 0.125424944231 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0617760617761 0.0416121511921 148% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.43589877723 2.79052419416 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0212355212355 0.026700313972 80% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.119691119691 0.113004496875 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0366795366795 0.0255425247493 144% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0173745173745 0.0127820249294 136% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2698.0 2731.13054187 99% => OK
No of words: 476.0 446.07635468 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66806722689 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.31512605042 0.378187486979 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.226890756303 0.287650121315 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.128151260504 0.208842608468 61% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0735294117647 0.135150697306 54% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43589877723 2.79052419416 87% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 207.018472906 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457983193277 0.469332199767 98% => OK
Word variations: 51.6976798237 52.1807786196 99% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 19.04 23.2022227129 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3881786065 57.7814097925 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.92 141.986410481 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.04 23.2022227129 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.64 0.724660767414 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 41.7290756303 51.9672348444 80% => OK
Elegance: 1.72519083969 1.8405768891 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34282922121 0.441005458295 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.11440149017 0.135418324435 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0791169405844 0.0829849096947 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.529401418828 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152842161362 0.147661913831 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134203417048 0.193483328276 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754319960656 0.0970749176394 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.442080209545 0.42659136922 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0449621008215 0.0774707102158 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23829658422 0.312017818177 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339866560551 0.0698173142475 49% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.82512315271 207% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.82389162562 283% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 14.657635468 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
---------------------
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.