"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
The recommendation given by the board of directors might seem appealing in the first glance that Monarch Books should open a café in its store. However, to fully evaluate this argument we need to consider many factors which might end up weakening the argument or might actually be quite valid. In order to make that determination, we need to know more and then analyze what we learnt.
The first piece of evidence that we would need in order to evaluate the argument is how many children visit the Monarch Books, as the café is being built by discontinuing the children’s session. Another point that has to be considered is that children are generally interested in books, which might affect the number of children coming to the Monarch Books as well as the elders who take their children and come to the store, this might create a significant decline in the total number of children and elders coming to the store.
Further, relying on the national census might not be advisable for it is a census given for the whole nation, we do not know whether the population of children has decreased in that area or increased. Moreover it is just the population of children who are under the age of 10, it doesn’t talk about the total number of children.
Building up, evidence which can be considered is whether or not the Regal has cut down the children’s session. We are not aware of the way in which the café was built, whether it has an extra space to build the café or it has discontinued any session. Further the Regal has recently opened the café and the results of it are not known. This can’t be a good stand from board of director's.
Besides, the Monarch Books has been there since past 20years and is known for its collection of books and has a good customer base, compromising on the books for the café is not a good idea. This could have been valid if it had an enough space for the café but that is not the situation.
Clearly, we can say that this argument doesn’t have a good support to defend its conclusion. It has to be reconsidered for a better understanding.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...as decreased in that area or increased. Moreover it is just the population of children w...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 50, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...up, evidence which can be considered is whether or not the Regal has cut down the children&apo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 153, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...econsidered for a better understanding.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'besides', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'then', 'well', 'as to', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.208037825059 0.25644967241 81% => OK
Verbs: 0.19621749409 0.15541462614 126% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0520094562648 0.0836205057962 62% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0449172576832 0.0520304965353 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0472813238771 0.0272364105082 174% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.106382978723 0.125424944231 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0591016548463 0.0416121511921 142% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.68139134696 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0283687943262 0.026700313972 106% => OK
Particles: 0.00709219858156 0.001811407834 392% => OK
Determiners: 0.127659574468 0.113004496875 113% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0283687943262 0.0255425247493 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0212765957447 0.0127820249294 166% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2126.0 2731.13054187 78% => OK
No of words: 375.0 446.07635468 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66933333333 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.272 0.378187486979 72% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.205333333333 0.287650121315 71% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.157333333333 0.208842608468 75% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.08 0.135150697306 59% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68139134696 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 207.018472906 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445333333333 0.469332199767 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.3259951199 52.1807786196 89% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.039408867 75% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.2022227129 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9413472538 57.7814097925 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.733333333 141.986410481 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.2022227129 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.733333333333 0.724660767414 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 45.5333333333 51.9672348444 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.29508196721 1.8405768891 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3473752687 0.441005458295 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.183641670644 0.135418324435 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.101976171457 0.0829849096947 123% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.668254788187 0.58762219726 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.161792468437 0.147661913831 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156086784783 0.193483328276 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861641615314 0.0970749176394 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.394602615822 0.42659136922 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.133871551079 0.0774707102158 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222955994529 0.312017818177 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642223618067 0.0698173142475 92% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
---------------------
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
---------------------
Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.