When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is
still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's
parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity: the recordings showed an
average of only 50 cars per day. In contrast, tiny Carlton Park in the heart of the business
district is visited by more than 150 people on a typical weekday. An obvious difference is that
Carlton Park, unlike Stanley Park, provides ample seating. Thus, if Stanley Park is ever to be as
popular with our citizens as Carlton Park, the town will obviously need to provide more
benches, thereby converting some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable for
socializing.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the
argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and
what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author states that the Stanley Park is growing less popular due to the lack of proper seating arrangement, thus for popularizing Stanley park, ample seating facilities should be introduced. The author provides an example of another park with proper seating arrangements currently flourishing and the number of cars visiting the park daily to support his argument. The reasoning behind this argument is faulty because of three assumptions by the author.
Firstly, the author assumes that the number of cars visiting the park necessarily determines the popularity of the park. If the number of cars is the data we depend on to determine the popularity of any park, it would be very wrong. It might be the case that the park is visited by people for recreational uses, physical activities, biking, fishing, picnic, bird watching etc. They might use buses for school picnic, bikes or visit the park on foot than use cars to commute to the park. So the author assuming the number of cars as a sole evidence of the parks popularity does not seem rational.
Further, it is assumed that the people visiting the Carlton park on weekdays do that to actually use seating facilities of the park. The passage states that the park is located at the heart of the business district. Most of the people in a business district on weekdays might use the park as a daily route to their workplaces, or the park might just be a shortcut to go from some point to another point. They Nowhere is it stated that the people actually go there to sit and socialize. So the parks popularity might be illusive if this assumption proves false.
Finally, the author suggests that people prefer parks with seating arrangements for socializing to the parks without them. The park is not the only people people use to socialize. restaurants provide proper seating arrangements too for that purpose. Then again for sitting and having a good time does not necessarily require benches in a natural open space. Sitting on the grass does not seem too bad, does it? So, a parks fundamental essence might not be a proper seating arrangement per the author's assumption.
The overstated assumptions seriously weaken the rationality behind the argument that providing seating arrangements will help rejuvenating Stanly Park. More data in the above contexts should be gathered before taking the proper decision before attempting to revive the park.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 1965 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.876 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.621 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.294 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.58 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 369, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the park daily to support his argument. The reasoning behind this argument is fault...
^^^
Line 3, column 556, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parks'' or 'park's'?
Suggestion: parks'; park's
...umber of cars as a sole evidence of the parks popularity does not seem rational. F...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 418, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
...me point to another point. They Nowhere is it stated that the people actually go t...
^^
Line 5, column 494, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parks'' or 'park's'?
Suggestion: parks'; park's
...y go there to sit and socialize. So the parks popularity might be illusive if this as...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 149, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: people
... without them. The park is not the only people people use to socialize. restaurants provide p...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... The park is not the only people people use to socialize. restaurants provide prope...
^^^
Line 7, column 181, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Restaurants
...he only people people use to socialize. restaurants provide proper seating arrangements too...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 494, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...be a proper seating arrangement per the authors assumption. The overstated assumptio...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 127, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to rejuvenate' or 'rejuvenate'.
Suggestion: to rejuvenate; rejuvenate
...roviding seating arrangements will help rejuvenating Stanly Park. More data in the above con...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, firstly, if, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2015.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 403.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67483668214 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466501240695 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.822521925 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9523809524 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1904761905 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52380952381 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373575949465 0.218282227539 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14332963866 0.0743258471296 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953964027017 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239859613787 0.128457276422 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634915123427 0.0628817314937 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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