Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. According to the Leeville Chamber of Commerce, these facts can be attributed to the health benefits of the relatively relaxed pace of life in Leeville.
The author argues that small town Leeville's citizens take fewer sick days; they have lower percentage of the stress-related diseases: they follow the relax pace of life. This seems to be simple and easy going idea but in fact it is not that simple as mentioned by this prompt. This argument is not cogent; it rife with many holes. Hence, this argument is incomplete.
First of all, argument readily claims that Leevill's people take fewer sick days but why? There is not persuasive reason,even there is not exact conclusion. It compares the nearby another city Masonton's people; however, workers of the Masonton's may have taken sick days without sick. Perhaps the citizens are unscrupulous: they take sick leave for their own other personal activities.
Secondly, sickness not only depend upon the mental activities. It depends upon the physical activities. Lack of the proper physical activities led the physical problems. Author provides another foolhardy thought that stress related problems also less rather than Masonton. What is relation between mental diseases and place. Even author could not provide the effective reason. It is needed to research towards the other factors of the sickness. Natural environment also crucial factor for the health. What factors make the present scenario? After estimating these types of the problem only give the proper solution.
To recapitulate, relaxed pace of life only can not determine the illness. Careful scrutiny reveals that details observation is required before to implement the new policy. I suggest to search the answer of the above questions and draw the conclusion.After that will be a complete argument.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...he stress-related diseases: they follow the relax pace of life. This seems to be simple a...
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Line 2, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , even
... but why? There is not persuasive reason,even there is not exact conclusion. It compa...
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Line 3, column 541, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...What factors make the present scenario? After estimating these types of the problem o...
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Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: After
...above questions and draw the conclusion.After that will be a complete argument.
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Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...above questions and draw the conclusion.After that will be a complete argument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 55.5748502994 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 263.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32319391635 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65025284824 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.634980988593 0.468620217663 136% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 22.8473053892 53% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7819705993 57.8364921388 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.6666666667 119.503703932 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.5238095238 23.324526521 54% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211120906422 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0420170696373 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740723913862 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103723843199 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0723297413631 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.3799401198 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.84 48.3550499002 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.2 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.69 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 11.1389221557 61% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.