Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people.Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
First, the argument readily assumes that the Palean baskets have only been made in the prehistoric village of Palea. If they have only been created in this prehistoric village, who was creating them? Was there a group of specific people making them? Did they create the distinctive patterns found on the baskets? For the argument to declare that the baskets have only been made by Palean people, the author needs answer questions like these to support their claim.
Not only does the argument fail to address why the baskets were solely made by Palean people, but it fails to acknowledge how the baskets could have potentially been traded across different land regions. The argument has provided evidence of the Brim River being deep and broad, however, it fails to take environmental changes into consideration. Rivers are continually changing due to flooding and droughts. The argument ignores the Brim River could have been narrow and shallow during the prehistoric Palean time. To make the claim that boats could not travel on it due to its depth, one must take the environmental changes into consideration.
Finally, the argument fails to discuss trade routes that occurred with the Palean people. Trade routes bring goods and mix different goods from many cultures all throughout the world. Did a Palean tradesman exchange the basket with a tradesman from another place that would eventually reach Lithos? To make the claim that the basket is not unique to the Palean culture due to its findings in Lithos, the author must expand on the trade routes to support their argument.
In conclusion, the argument has ideas that appear plausible. However, it is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is not convincing. The author could strengthen their argument by supporting the questions asked and clearly mentioning more relevant facts. Without the answers to these facts, the argument remains unclear to the reader.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 313 350
No. of Characters: 1577 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.206 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.038 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.493 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.389 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.312 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 50, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 313.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17891373802 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57312493675 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514376996805 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5597029843 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0555555556 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3888888889 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281643224481 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911732375576 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117292342062 0.0701772020484 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164502858736 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15079834538 0.0628817314937 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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