Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a “Palean” basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The presented argument is flawing in its claim that Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean, so the evidence is needed to gainsay or support the idea that Palean people could not cross the Brim River.
If there is no evidence of Palean boats it can be concluded that people did not need them to cross the river. For example, the direction of the river flow differed from the contemporary one. Or maybe there were some especially dry years when the river had become shallower that Palean people managed to cross the river just on foot. The author of the argument should present some specifying information about climate changes.
Furthermore, climate changes could be not only long-termed like many years draughts. The argument is lacking for any general information about the Palea environment or geographical location. Let us assume that it is a quite nothern village where severe cold winters are a natural phenomenon. Consequently, these extremely low temperatures cause the Brim river to freeze and be covered with a layer of thin ice save enough to cross the river. So it is necessary to provide sufficient data about temperature changes during the year as short-term climate changes compared to presented drought in the previous paragraph.
Probably, most of us are familiar with other ways to cross the river except simple boats. For instance, it could be just a log big and long enough to be stable for carrying people on it. After crossing the river those logs could be burnt. Moreover, there is mentioned in the argument that Palean people had been prehistoric, and eventually, there are no reasons to assert that the population of Palea was able to construct boats. It can be stated that the claim about boat building is weak and requires any additional information about Palean's skills in crafts.
To sum up the above, it was presented that the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions, so it fails to make a convincing case that Palean people had no opportunity to cross the river. Only one opportunity was reviewed which is lacking in verifying evidence.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 347 350
No. of Characters: 1697 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.316 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.89 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.602 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.412 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.769 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... people could not cross the Brim River. If there is no evidence of Palean boats it...
^^^
Line 4, column 187, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to be stable for carrying people on it. After crossing the river those logs could be ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 347.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99135446686 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67911728808 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527377521614 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3518489489 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.882352941 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4117647059 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0806486692315 0.218282227539 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0278305402332 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295843847409 0.0701772020484 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0530075761824 0.128457276422 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209807940104 0.0628817314937 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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