Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Educational institutions should encourage students to be intelligent in different aspects, consequently, I do not agree with the stated claim in general. Who are those people deciding if any student will be successful or not in any particular area? And what are the main indicators of possible failure or success? It is well-known that history is abundant in examples of unprepossessing persons who have become outstanding in the future. Albert Einstein, who is one of the most luminant scientists of all the times, hardly could be named as a diligent student at his time, this is a well-known fact.
There could be numerous reasons why a particular student seems unlikely to have great success in some field of study. For instance, it could be a lack of interest because of a boring professor with abstruse lectures. I think that special interest and excitement are very important in self-motivation for studying. Probably, a student could not even imagine that some subjects would be so interesting and enthralling. And everybody knows that it is better to try and not to succeed than not to try and then to regret about possible success. But sometimes failure can be so disgusting that a person would never believe in his or her future success in any other beginnings. Probably, the educational institutions should protect their students from obvious and inevitable failures, not from trying to test themselves in something new.
In some extreme situations, i.e., economics failure in the country, a person will be able to find another workplace if he or she has abundant and different skills. Eventually, the broader knowledge and experience in different areas of life, the better student understands own future possibilities in career. But of course, there should be some limits in investigating various fields of study because a student could not come to any decision regarding his or her profession. In the end, a good specialist is one who expounds his or her knowledge in depth, not in width.
It is a difficult burden for educational institutes both to graduate confident students ready to conquer this world and at the same time not to restrain them in investigating different aspects and possibilities of their lives. In the end, it looks like a task for a good mother who wants her baby to be safe and not to be damaged, but who also wants not to be limiting and inhibitory as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 459, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...nd everybody knows that it is better to try and not to succeed than not to try and then...
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Line 3, column 494, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...r to try and not to succeed than not to try and then to regret about possible success. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, look, regarding, so, then, well, for instance, i think, in general, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98258706468 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98507980928 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514925373134 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5506653621 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.277777778 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.096711679531 0.243740707755 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0341101344715 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404574800722 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0612136680362 0.150359130593 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250565831761 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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