Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The argument made has made numerous assumptions in concluding that the palean baskets were not uniquely made by the Palean. The timeline of when these Paleans were present is not mentioned because of which the presence of the river or the depth of the river is not known.
The argument, while stating that the river is deep and can be crossed only using boats is an assumption which does not stand if the Paleans existed at a time when the river might not have been that deep or even existed. Had the river not been very deep or been nothing but a simple piece of land, the paleans could easily have come in contact with the nearby villages like Lithos. The presence of the period of existence of the Paleans could have helped analyse whether the baskets were idiosyncratic to the paleans.
The argument also assumes that boats could be the only mode of transportation between two villages. During the ancient times the there could very well have been different ways to communicate between villages across the river. These ways of transportation could have become extinct since the advent of boats which explains the absence of boats. However, if there was no history of any other way of transportation across the river, the conclusion could have stood its ground. Without proper research about the methods of communication between villages, premature assumptions cannot be made.
Barter system was among the most famous ways of exchanging essentials among different groups in return. Barter system could have been prevalent during the Palean when the items unique to a specific village were exchanged for everyday items not easily available in the Palean villages. There might have been several exchanges between the Paleans and the Lithos which would essentially explain why the archeologists found the unique Palean woven baskets in Lithos. If there was foolproof evidence of no relation between the two villages there could have been a possibility that the conclusion is correct. Had the argument mentioned the exchanges that might have taken place between the adjacent villages, the claims could have been studied further.
With the many assumption that the argument makes without taking into consideration the various reasons why the conclusion might be flawed, it cannot be established that woven baskets with distinctive patterns found in the Palean region were not unique to them.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 392 350
No. of Characters: 1971 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.45 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.028 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.499 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.802 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.437 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the depth of the river is not known. The argument, while stating that the river ...
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Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... unique Palean woven baskets in Lithos. If there was foolproof evidence of no rela...
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Line 6, column 10, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'many assumptions'.
Suggestion: many assumptions
...d have been studied further. With the many assumption that the argument makes without taking ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 392.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11734693878 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53800249896 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456632653061 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.778994423 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.375 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4375 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291014000038 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10787643223 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582302422459 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166359666589 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486697905699 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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