Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The writer explains about the Palean baskets which were thought to be unique, but as well as archeologists discovered such a Palean basket in Lithos, he concludes that it was not unique anymore, because there was not any sign of boats in the Palea in order to cross the deep and broad river between Palea and Lithos. However, this conclusion cannot be accepted as it is in that it rests on a number of erroneous premises all of which can be challenged in one way or another.
Let’s start with the consideration of the writer’s flawed assumptions, he/she assumes that as no Palean boats have been found, there was not any boats in Palea at all. There is no strong evidence to prove this. Maybe because of the boats wooden body, they were all ruined during these years. Or maybe because of some undetermined reasons all of the dwellers in this village had moved to other places using their boats, so there was not any sign of boats.
Another problem with the argument that deserves attention is that the writer wrongly assumes that the only way of transferring these baskets is boats. In fact, there are lots of different ways in order to change the place of baskets. For instance, maybe different natural disasters have occurred like storms, tornados or things like that and brought baskets to Lithos. Or maybe some different animals or birds that have the ability of crossing the river via swimming or flying are the key points of this issue. Or maybe, settlers in Palea and Lithos had constructed a bridge between villages in order to transfer commodities and trading with each other that was devastated.
A third problem with this argument is that the writer assumes that the place of these villages didn’t change during this long period. Maybe there was not any river between these two villages at first and this river formed suddenly after a strong earthquake, or even maybe it was shaped gradually. Also it is plausible to say that maybe they themselves constructed this river. So this is not a logical point in order to decide about the uniqueness of baskets at all.
In the final analysis, the writer’s conclusion cannot be taken to be correct and reasonable because, as it was shown in the body paragraphs above, it depends on a number of assumptions each of which is questionable. The conclusion can only be accepted if the weaknesses already referred to are all removed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 416 350
No. of Characters: 1928 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.516 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.635 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.449 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.009 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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The writer explains about the Palean bas...
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...n be challenged in one way or another. Let's start with the consideration ...
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...be because of some undetermined reasons all of the dwellers in this village had moved to o...
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...s, so there was not any sign of boats. Another problem with the argument that d...
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...ng with each other that was devastated. A third problem with this argument is th...
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...t and this river formed suddenly after a strong earthquake, or even maybe it was ...
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... or even maybe it was shaped gradually. Also it is plausible to say that maybe they ...
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...bout the uniqueness of baskets at all. In the final analysis, the writer's...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, third, well, for instance, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1993.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81400966184 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59817726489 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461352657005 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3957677564 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.235294118 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3529411765 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118546701257 0.218282227539 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378098212396 0.0743258471296 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363109487473 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0675495000125 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328747745394 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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