Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people Recently however archaeol | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The statement above concludes that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. The evidence provided to support this conclusion is that recently archaeologists discovered such a basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. Since there were no Palean boats and the Brim River is very deep and broad, Paleans could have not crossed it by any other means. Hence the author arrives at the above mentioned conclusion. However, the evidence provided by the author is not adequate and hence the conclusion drawn on the basis of the evidence is faulty.

It has been stated that one basket was discovered in the village of Lithos. No doubt the discovery of the so-called Palean basket on the other side of the river points to some evidence but it does not necessarily support the fact that those baskets were made by the people of Lithos as well. There is a very high possibility that the one basket got washed up on the banks of Brim River, which flows between the two villages of Lithos and Palea, where the village of Lithos is located, by happy chance.

One of the evidences on which the conclusions was based was that the Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat. As it is known that over a period of time, rivers can change the structure of the earth and the shape of their stream as well. Therefore, assuming that the Paleans would not have been able to cross the river without a boat is completely wrong as we do not know about the geographical characteristics of the river. The river could have been shallow at that time and it might have been possible to cross the river without boats, which suggests that the two villages could have had knowledge of each others existence.

It has also been stated that there are no Palean boats found and hence if the Brim River was deep and broad at that time then the Paleans would not have any means to cross the river. This is a faulty conclusion because no Palean boats have been found does not necessarily mean that Paleans didn't have any boats. The evidence of Palean boats could have been destroyed or the evidence might not have been discovered yet.

Thus while all the evidence already discovered about the Paleans and the basket on the other side of the river, it is not strong enough to bolster the conclusion that has been drawn about the so-called Palean baskets not being uniquely Palean.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 391, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...have not crossed it by any other means. Hence the author arrives at the above mention...
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Line 7, column 195, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...nly by boat. As it is known that over a period of time, rivers can change the structure of the...
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Line 7, column 665, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...llages could have had knowledge of each others existence. It has also been stated...
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Line 10, column 291, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... does not necessarily mean that Paleans didnt have any boats. The evidence of Palean ...
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Line 10, column 420, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nce might not have been discovered yet. Thus while all the evidence already disc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 433.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66512702079 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30725297856 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.394919168591 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9653956374 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.25 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0625 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265070564143 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10711158594 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06452192968 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166155209267 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454966346402 0.0628817314937 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments