Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author argues that the charectiristc woven baskets which are known as Palean baskets, finally they are not uniquely Palean. This argument is based on the premise that archaelogists discovered Palean basket in Lithos, a village which was located across the Brim River and Paleans could not have crossed it as no Palean boats have been detected. However, on deeper analysis, it becomes apparent that certain relevant aspects have not been taken into consideration, leading to a number of logical flaws and mistaken assumptions.
One such flaw is the argument that no Paleans boats have been found and thus Palean could not have been able to cross the Brim River. Albeit, it is possible that after so many years as the Palean baskets were manufactured in prehistoric times, the Palean boats have been decomposed totally taking into account the impact of the river's water. In order to stengthen his/her argument, the author should cite specific historic and undenied sources which would demonstrate that indeed the ancient residents in Lithos had the knowledge and skills to manufacture woven baskets as Paleans.
Moreover, the author wrongly is based on the premise that the Brim River is very deep and broad. Though, this river in prehistoric times could be a small stream or maybe did not exist as geology after so hunder years surely has changed the area. To overcome this flaw, the author should make references to historic sources which would demosntrate that the Brim River was trully so broad and deep as current time.
The author also is incorrectly based on the premise that Palean could have crossed the Brim River only by a boat. Although, there is a possibility that Paleans have achieved to create so enhanced civilization for their era, that they had the mechanics, the skills and the knowledge to consruct a wooden brifge in a narrow location of the Brim River in order to cross over the river and reach the other side. To render his/her argument more valid, the author should mention specific sources which would depict the lack of ability of Palean civilaziation to construct a wooden bridge.
After closer examination of the passage presented, is apparent that there are several flaws. The recommendations in the eesay show how the argument may be strenghtened and made more logically sound.
Comments
e-rater score report
Sentence: The author argues that the charectiristc woven baskets which are known as Palean baskets, finally they are not uniquely Palean.
Error: charectiristc Suggestion: characteristic
Sentence: This argument is based on the premise that archaelogists discovered Palean basket in Lithos, a village which was located across the Brim River and Paleans could not have crossed it as no Palean boats have been detected.
Error: archaelogists Suggestion: archeologists
Sentence: In order to stengthen his/her argument, the author should cite specific historic and undenied sources which would demonstrate that indeed the ancient residents in Lithos had the knowledge and skills to manufacture woven baskets as Paleans.
Error: undenied Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: stengthen Suggestion: strengthen
Sentence: Though, this river in prehistoric times could be a small stream or maybe did not exist as geology after so hunder years surely has changed the area.
Error: hunder Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To overcome this flaw, the author should make references to historic sources which would demosntrate that the Brim River was trully so broad and deep as current time.
Error: demosntrate Suggestion: demonstrate
Error: trully Suggestion: truly
Sentence: Although, there is a possibility that Paleans have achieved to create so enhanced civilization for their era, that they had the mechanics, the skills and the knowledge to consruct a wooden brifge in a narrow location of the Brim River in order to cross over the river and reach the other side.
Error: brifge Suggestion: bridge
Error: consruct Suggestion: construct
Sentence: To render his/her argument more valid, the author should mention specific sources which would depict the lack of ability of Palean civilaziation to construct a wooden bridge.
Error: civilaziation Suggestion: civilization
Sentence: The recommendations in the eesay show how the argument may be strenghtened and made more logically sound.
Error: eesay Suggestion: essay
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: strenghtened Suggestion: strengthened
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1892 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.902 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.497 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.664 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.382 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02864583333 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55714713398 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494791666667 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3263571535 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.928571429 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4285714286 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07142857143 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20649902859 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078805868714 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793712179287 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115900078935 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0959582939829 0.0628817314937 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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