Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Archaeology and excavations have resulted in discovering several heritage sites and objects of cultural importance. Numerous items from Indus Valley Civilization have been found recently from the cities of Harappa and Mohenjodaro. These excavations give us an insight into the lifestyle of early man. The argument here talks about the discovery of woven baskets in Palea and Lithos. These baskets were first discovered at the prehistoric village in Palea, which led to the belief that the baskets originated in Palea and were only made by the Palean people. But the recent excavations at Lithos has questioned this belief. The argument here believes that the baskets are not authentic to Palean people, but have originated in different villages with a bit variation. The statement has not provided any information regarding transportation and trade between two towns or the timeline of the Brim river.
The argument has failed to provide us with ample information to decide the origin of these baskets. Although it does mention that no Palean boat has been found until now, thus shutting down the prospect of water transport between Palea and Lithos. But the hypothesis fails to tell the reader that if any other mode of transportation was available in the prehistoric times. It might be the case, there is or was a land cover connecting these two villages and thus led to the exchange of ideas and resources.
The argument has not mentioned details about the trade and commerce between the two villages. There might be the case that the two villages were dependent on each other for survival. Take, for example, the case of cities of Harappa in Pakistan and Lothal in Gujrat. Both the towns were flourishing centers for socio-economic exchanges of the Indus Valley Civilization. Separated by a stretch of deserts and rivers, several excavations have been found in these cities providing evidence of transport and trade. The possibility of trade and commerce between Palea and Lithos will play an essential role in deciding the origin of these baskets.
Most importantly, the argument fails to present the timeline of the Brim River. There is a high possibility that the Brim River originated much later to this civilization, and the two villages were connected by land. There are high chances that the towns might not be in direct contact but may have a transport route through another town. The author needs to discuss this prospect to strengthen the argument.
To decide the origin of the woven baskets, it is necessary to consider many other factors influencing the bilateral links between both the villages. There are high chances the villages were involved in active trade and commerce. Improved studies need to be carried out to determine the timeline of the Brim river. The argument has failed to provide the readers with the necessary information. Further investigation of these metrics needs to be carried out to strengthen the argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 482 350
No. of Characters: 2425 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.686 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.031 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.683 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.852 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.212 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.283 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.283 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, regarding, so, then, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2472.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 482.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12863070539 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74896813591 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446058091286 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 791.1 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4750132491 57.8364921388 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.5555555556 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8518518519 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.18518518519 5.70786347227 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198101224919 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498412719503 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645396538384 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107849491167 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906012557796 0.0628817314937 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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