Woven baskets charecterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a " Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim river form Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crosed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
In this paragraph, the author insists that palean baskets were not only produced in palean. Though, this claim is unconvincing because it inferred from several unsubstantiated assumptions without valid evidence. In order to make this argument reliable, close scrutiny that bolster author’s claim needs to be added. Otherwise, it is vulnerable to criticism.
First and the most, mentioning that the deep and broad river refrained people from trading, the author presumes that the river was too big to cross in past as well as present. To assess this assumption, there should be clear evidence that validate maintenance of size of river. Documents of geological shift or scientific evidence of erosion could show past figure of the river. If some evidences show that Brim river was shallow enough to ramble, author's argument will be weakened. But, river was in same shape as today, it will be annealed.
Another problem of this opinion is that the author assumes that there is no transportation method from the passage citing that absent vestige of boat. To evaluate whether this supposition is valid or not, identification of absence of boat and presence of another shipping method are needed to be addressed. In the author’s claim, as a transportation, boat is the only one cited. However, there is an possibility for existence of another method like bridge or cable that connect across Brim river. Also, boat existed in past but, lack of scientific development which can search trace can ruin conclusive evidence. So, if there is evidence of transportation, the author’s insistence will wane but, if not, it will be strengthened.
Last but no least, ‘a palean basket’ is not to considered as an evidence. Typhoon , floods or strong wind can transfer a palean basket to other regions. Many possible coincidences can make movement of a few baskets. For more explicit opinion, more number of palean basket is required to be corroborated as clear evidence.
In conclusion, the argument lacks clarity as many details seem to be omitted for such an important issue. To better assess the argument, the author needs to provide more supplementary investigation including shift of shape of Brim river, vestige of transportation, more palean baskets. Lacking such information, the author’s claim remains far-fetched.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1880 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.067 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.834 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.864 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.918 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: scrutiny
...n order to make this argument reliable, close scrutiny that bolster author's claim needs ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 403, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...s the only one cited. However, there is an possibility for existence of another me...
^^
Line 5, column 646, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve evidence. So, if there is evidence of transportation, the author's insist...
^^
Line 7, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ot to considered as an evidence. Typhoon , floods or strong wind can transfer a pa...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, well, as to, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 371.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32884097035 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05134289007 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530997304582 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1502089621 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8636363636 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8636363636 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.59090909091 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0544148624774 0.218282227539 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0206963334442 0.0743258471296 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424355367354 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0376226541902 0.128457276422 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323223411469 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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