Write a response in which you deliberate on the kind of questions that need answers before deciding
whether the suggestion and the supporting argument are practical. Be certain to clarify how the answers
to these questions would aid in assessing the the quality of recommendation.
Two years ago, Restora Health Care center in Masonville decided to start a health awareness
program for its residents. Since that time, Restora's share of patients in the Masonville area has
significantly increased. Moreover, a survey conducted across the nation indicates that many
people are inclined towards these kind of awareness programs. Citing these facts, the director of
Claris Care Health center in Amway has suggested that Claris should also initiate such health
awareness programs of its own to entice more patients from its community.
The author of the argument suggests that, as Restora Health Care centre in Masonville implemented health care awarness prgramme, its share of patients increasesd and this was conforemed by supporting survey cinducted. Thus, Clarsi Care Health centerin Amway has suggested to conduct similar sessions to attract patients. At first glance, the argument might seem true, but after scrutinizing, argument has several flaes and unwarranted assumptions. Thus without answering the following questions the argument cannot be considered valid.
To start with, Restora Health Care centre in Masonville started its campaign two years ago, and thus, how can we rely on such old campaign idea? As within two year many aspectes can be changed, the health care awarness itself migh have been increased amongst its citizens and there whoun not be any need of such canpagnes again. The way of living and the mentality would have developed in a salubrius way and leading to change in its society. Thus, just relying on, one such example of success in Masonville, cannot be considered to do the same in Amway.
Additionally, How can two different locations be compared with one other? As Masonvalle and Amway being completely different locations, how can we compare these geographies. The case might be exactly opposite societies and such kind of program whould not entice any one in Amway as they already persue the knowledge. Also, there whould have any other health center in Amway, that would have already implemented such program and have already increased its patients. This would drastically affect the success of Claris center. If these holds true then the argument is rife with holes.
Although the author provides support through survey but, on what basis the survey can hold true? What were the auestions asked in the survey? Were they ansered with 100% guarrenty of truth? What were the percentage or number of citizent surveyed? All these questions need to be answered before relying on the results if the survey.
The arguement, as of now, relies heavily on unwarranted assumptions and need to answer all the queations asked above to prove its validity.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 23 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 348 350
No. of Characters: 1757 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.319 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.049 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.529 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.399 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.286 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.536 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 66, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Care) must be used with a third-person verb: 'centres'.
Suggestion: centres
...t suggests that, as Restora Health Care centre in Masonville implemented health care a...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 449, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...eral flaes and unwarranted assumptions. Thus without answering the following questio...
^^^^
Line 3, column 36, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Care) must be used with a third-person verb: 'centres'.
Suggestion: centres
.... To start with, Restora Health Care centre in Masonville started its campaign two...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Restora Health Care centre in Masonville started its campaign two years ago, and ...
^^
Line 5, column 46, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ionally, How can two different locations be compared with one other? As Masonvall...
^^
Line 5, column 527, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ly affect the success of Claris center. If these holds true then the argument is r...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, thus, kind of, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 13.6137724551 15% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 348.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21264367816 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6032325911 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557471264368 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.1535159207 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175726517304 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590064632851 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720120639454 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.095391367801 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290552885519 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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