147. The effectiveness of a country's leaders is best measured by examining the well-being of that country's citizen.
Many would say that country's leaders ability is shown through the citizen's well-being of that country. However, the following essay will argue that it is plausible to disagree with the people's statement.
Admittingly, the country's leaders are the people who solve the citizen's wanting when living. Citizens entails grudge when their living standard decreases, and country's leaders are chosen to solve those kinds of problems. The leaders are the representative of the citizen. Therefore, the more the country's leaders care for their citizen and listen to what they are in deficit of, the happier the citizens feel about their normal days. For example, there is a Seoul mayor, Wonsoon park. He actively gathers citizen's recommendation for what is needed for Seoul. Thus, every weekend, he posts what he has fixed and initiated to fix over the week on the Internet. This was a sensation in Korea because before him, citizens were ambiguous about the politician's work. We did not know what is being solved in our lives. However, now we can see what is being fixed and what is getting better in our daily lives, which increases our well-being. Therefore, we could say that the leader's ability is shown through the citizen's well-being.
However, we should keep in mind that what politicians do, does not come into action immediately. In other words, politicians' objectives are to be concluded in a long-term. Politicians aim to compromise variegated citizen's opinions into one to implement a legislation or a rule in the society. However, it takes a while to confluence the citizen's various ideas into one because it takes a lot of time to make people change their recalcitrant mind over one event. There will be demos on different places by the citizens that adhere to their opinion. So, although the politician have suggested a congenial idea, we cannot see the effect by looking at the citizen's well-being at that time. Therefore, we do not know to whom to commend the increased well-being. It could have been thanks to the previous leader or the one before that leader.
Moreover, as is often the case, the well-being of citizens is often dissipated when a leader tries to initiate a substantive action. It will vacilliate the society. For example, there is Martin Luther King who was a leader in the past, who aimed for a equivalent society between the black and the white. At that time, there were massacre in the country, and it was a disaster in the States. However, nowadays, we thank Martin Luther King for our less discrimination between the races which massively increased our well-being in the world. Therefore, we cannot choose the citizen's well-being to appraise the leader.
In sum, I believe that leader's ability should not be decided upon the citizen's well-being. The reason for this is that, normally, politics should be seen in the long-run game, and during a leader's regime who now is appreciated, the citizen's well-being at that time could even decrease for struggling between the different parties. Moreover, since the effectiveness is to be seen later in the future, we do not know to whom to thank the increased well-being of the current lives.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It will vacilliate the society.
Error: vacilliate Suggestion: facilitate
flaws:
The example used in the fourth is not proper. The topic is for 'a country's leaders', not 'a party's leaders'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 30 15
No. of Words: 529 350
No. of Characters: 2585 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.796 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.887 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.683 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 184 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 144 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.633 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.181 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.286 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.444 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.191 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...at it is plausible to disagree with the peoples statement. Admittingly, the countrys...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 969, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...being. Therefore, we could say that the leaders ability is shown through the citizens w...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...cians objectives are to be concluded in a long-term. Politicians aim to compromise variegat...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 251, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...was a leader in the past, who aimed for a equivalent society between the black an...
^
Line 9, column 24, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...e the leader. In sum, I believe that leaders ability should not be decided upon the ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 190, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...seen in the long-run game, and during a leaders regime who now is appreciated, the citi...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.217755443886 0.240241500013 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.175879396985 0.157235817809 112% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0452261306533 0.0880659088768 51% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0552763819095 0.0497285424764 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0519262981575 0.0444667217837 117% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112227805695 0.12292977631 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0435510887772 0.0406280797675 107% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.73003338551 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0301507537688 0.030933414821 97% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.118927973199 0.0997080785238 119% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0217755443886 0.0249443105267 87% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0318257956449 0.0148568991511 214% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3175.0 2732.02544248 116% => OK
No of words: 529.0 452.878318584 117% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00189035917 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.58838876751 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.364839319471 0.366273622748 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.283553875236 0.280924506359 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.207939508507 0.200843997647 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.119092627599 0.132149295362 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73003338551 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 219.290929204 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453686200378 0.48968727796 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.8303203297 55.4138127331 95% => OK
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6194690265 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.6333333333 23.380412469 75% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2198084105 59.4972553346 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.833333333 141.124799967 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6333333333 23.380412469 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.674092028746 59% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 45.988720857 51.4728631049 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.31952662722 1.64882698954 80% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364725814066 0.391690518653 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.154321735296 0.123202303941 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.103435845305 0.077325440228 134% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.493987011332 0.547984918172 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15226752108 0.149214159877 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14287618729 0.161403998019 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945859970046 0.0892212321368 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.458718095869 0.385218514788 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0655638129767 0.0692045440612 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285723766825 0.275328986314 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590124167328 0.0653680567796 90% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88274336283 287% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.70907079646 185% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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