1.Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and su

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1. Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The author of the issue claims that institutions should applaud the students to follow and study the field which ends to the high-income affair. This is the assertation with which I generally do not concur. Among the countless reasons which give adherence to my perspective, in the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones to rear my standpoint.
The first striking reason which should be considered is the inconsistency of salaries. In another word, the amount of income from a job for the sake its popularity does not possess a standing trend and it faces fluctuations because of alteration of job’s popularity. A lucid example which shed spotlights toward this reason is the fame of the architecture in my hometown Tabriz. Approximately, one decade ago becoming an architecture was so arduous and considered as a prestigious affair among the people. Therefore, with this background, the amount of architectures’ income was so high in the city. However, during this last ten years, it does not own the same position among the people; according to this popularity at the past, most of the students in Tabriz got eager to become an architect and this happened. By the millions of architectures in a small city, which leads to decrease of the ratio of available projects to architects, the amount of income from this affair reduces since there will be at least one person who does the design with low money. According to this example, it is obvious that asking students to follow the same popular and lucrative job is a dead-end job.
Another equal crux reason which should be considered is that the main responsibility of the schools is providing the knowledgeable and flourishment space for the pupils to follow their desired and talent. Indeed, it is obvious that no students possess the same level of understanding and talent; consequently, asking the students for following the same pattern is not a wise action. On the other hand, by providing a great base for learning for students and figuring out their talents are the primary role of these organizations. As the student is familiar with his talent can easily pick a job which mostly aligned with his talent. In this case, his probability of success is also high.
The sentence “the main goal of the studying in universities is gaining a lucrative job, and this encouragement paves the path for students to achieve their goal” could shed shadow on the accuracy of perspective. However, an important fact is overlooked by this assertation, the study is not the only factor for gaining a high salary. According to the noteworthy intelligence research conducted by the Economic Department in Tehran University, the amount of salary mainly is related to the employees’ function in their career and the field of study has the sixth importance in the list of factors for earning the high salary. Thus, it is important to teach the topics with high depth and there is a difference among the field, the knowledge over the issue is helpful for gaining a lucrative job.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons depicts that encouragement of students for following the same career is not biennial action.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 785, Rule ID: EAGER_TO[1]
Message: With 'eager to', use the base form of the verb: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
... of the students in Tabriz got eager to become an architect and this happened. By the ...
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Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he primary role of these organizations. As the student is familiar with his talent...
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Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the same career is not biennial action.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, at least, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2678.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 532.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03383458647 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00246756265 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479323308271 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 836.1 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5470811651 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.523809524 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210791441088 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707521181288 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493050601902 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129763163692 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484593855943 0.0667264976115 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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