An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.
The topic raises a controversial issue of whether an ailing patient should have an easy access to his her doctor's records of treating similarly afflicted patients. Indisputably, this would seem to give a fair idea to the patient of what he is getting into. Nevertheless, the conclusion made by such studies might not always be true and could create unnecessary doubts and confusions. Thus I would like to explore both options and discuss the advantage and disadvantage in both situations.
First of all, giving access to the patients of the doctor's records can be beneficial in some situations. In general, people are very careful in selecting a doctor when there is a more convoluted surgery and it involves huge amounts of investment. these normally included cases like, heart surgery, organ transplant, brain surgery, cancer treatment, dental treatment etc. In such situations an access to the records can be beneficial to the patient to come to a right judgement.Consequently, it is pretty obvious that a doctor with failed practices or little experience would not be the best fit in such situations and the patient deserves to know the history of the doctor in similar cases.
On the contrary, for patients suffering with common diseases like common cold, cough etc, this would not be the best idea to conclude it from doctor's history. Just like the fingerprints of every person is unique, so is their body and its reaction to various chemicals and medicines. The medicines prescribed by the doctor may or may not work the same for everyone and so, the patient might make a wrong judgement from the doctor's records.
In conclusion,although giving access to the patients of their doctor's records seems like a lucrative option, it may backfire in some situations as discussed above. As long as the patient can make a decision with logic and by carefully studying the resources, I think handing over the records is a good option. This could be better than how people choose their doctors today just from hearsay. In fact, if properly executed and with awareness amongst the people and the doctors, this could be a really good option to have.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: easy access
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Suggestion: Thus,
...eate unnecessary doubts and confusions. Thus I would like to explore both options an...
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...it involves huge amounts of investment. these normally included cases like, heart sur...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...ental treatment etc. In such situations an access to the records can be beneficial to the...
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Suggestion: Consequently
...he patient to come to a right judgement.Consequently, it is pretty obvious that a doctor wit...
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Suggestion: , although
...m the doctors records. In conclusion,although giving access to the patients of their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, may, nevertheless, really, similarly, so, thus, i think, in conclusion, in fact, in general, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1794.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99721448468 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91405643812 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540389972145 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4209280671 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.6 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9333333333 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 5.21951772744 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340227793344 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111837667416 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14756823331 0.0758088955206 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206833985877 0.150359130593 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842724645052 0.0667264976115 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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