The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition

The claim here raises a controversial issue if its the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry and other fields by instilling in them a sense of cooperaton and not competition. Indisputably, the sense of cooperation is impostant in young people of a nation to help them work together and reach towards a definite goal of improving it. Nevertheless, a sense of competition instilled in the same people would help them push through their limits and do wonder in improving the situation. hence, I feel that cooperation along with competition can help young people of a country to make it flourish boundlessly.

Firstly, cooperation among people is an impostant characterstic for the society to live in harmony and take unified decisions but when a feeling of competitiveness is added to this, it makes people perform better and sometimes even provide unexpected results. I would like to point that competition in government or industry leadership plays a very vital role in the society's development. As an illustration, lets take the example of governmental elections which takes place every five years to decide the ruling party for running the administration in the country. In such elections, parties being competitve, want to come up with better ideologies and strategies to help the nation grow as they want to win people's confidence. However, the net result would come only after a co-operated decision of the people but the confidence gives them better results.

Furthermore, competition in industry and other fields carries the same importance as when choosing a government. Competitveness between large scale companies, small scale companies etc. help them increase their revenue by brainstorming, implementing new ideas and coming with eclectic products. The same can be applied to other fields such as the scientific research groups, education system etc.For instance, competition between students in a class also helps them push their limits and worl harder towards a certain definite goal. The same is valid for various research groups in the country.

Admittedly, the competition shoud be taken in a healthy way or else it will just like the well full of frogs. the sense of competition is instilled to better your performence and not take down others on account of being the most superior. With such competitive spirit, we can be sure that through cooperation between the industries, the society's level will be upgraded and also set a better example to the younger generations.

In conclusion, although cooperation appears to be one of the most essential parts for a scoiety to grow, we still need competitiveness to gain better results. As long as it stays in a helathy manner and with no intention to harm others, it will surely work in the nation's best interest. In fact, the feeling of cooperation and competition should both be instilled in younger people to help the society flourish and produce marvels.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2506.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 483.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1884057971 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04301907777 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501035196687 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 767.7 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5736573192 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.3 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.15 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.21951772744 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398064403764 0.243740707755 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117610907915 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128920791193 0.0758088955206 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220299180716 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142478174803 0.0667264976115 214% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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