An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.

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An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.

The issue contends that any ailing patient should have an access to see the records of their respective doctor who is giving treatment to the another patient suffering from the same disease as he/she is going through. It states that by having this access would allow the ailing patient to determine whether the doctor is capable of treating the disease through which he/she is undergoing. Not all the diseases are same, they are somewhat different in some extent and there would be a subtle difference in diseases which we as a common people can't able to see, but a doctor can because they are in the profession, they are experts in what they are doing. And we as a common people have a limited knowledge of diseases and we superficially know about the disease but not fully. So any patient going under some treatment by a doctor should not be allowed to see other patient's report as they could not fully understand the report and might be misconstrue the report and come to a conclusion which would just be his/her imagination.

In today's world day by day there is an increase in cases where we come to know about a new disease which has not been encountered yet and treatment would be different for all of them. It would be inappropriate to just extrapolate the results of some another patient going through similar treatment because the issue itself states that similar but not same. Every person's immune system is unique from other's, some of the people would be immune to some particular disease where some would not be immune to that particular disease and every person's body react differently to the same disease, so we can't just say that if two people are suffering from a same disease, it might possible that both are cured or only one would be able to recover or neither, so we can't say anything about the present condition.

For example, if an area get's affected by some flu and the people living in the same area get's affected by a that common flu. Now a person goes to a doctor for his/her treatment, it could be possible that in the presence of the doctor some casualties might happen and at the same time the doctor has also saved lives of many people, and the number of people saved would be far more higher than the casualties. So one cannot say by afflicted person's report that what is going to happen with them.

The conclusion is the ailing patient should not deduce his /her result from someone's result and they should not have the access to the record of the doctor's treatment record, as most of the doctors are trying their best to save life's. So we just have to gain a trust if we are choosing a doctor and hope for the best.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...nds that any ailing patient should have an access to see the records of their respective ...
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Line 1, column 543, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...in diseases which we as a common people cant able to see, but a doctor can because t...
^^^^
Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ns immune system is unique from others, some of the people would be immune to some particul...
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Line 3, column 597, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... differently to the same disease, so we cant just say that if two people are sufferi...
^^^^
Line 3, column 758, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ld be able to recover or neither, so we cant say anything about the present conditio...
^^^^
Line 5, column 377, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'higher' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: higher
...the number of people saved would be far more higher than the casualties. So one cannot say ...
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Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...ot have the access to the record of the doctors treatment record, as most of the doctor...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2181.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55323590814 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35983877584 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.394572025052 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 691.2 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0359550562 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.7487490355 60.3974514979 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.769230769 118.986275619 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.8461538462 23.4991977007 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.30769230769 5.21951772744 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2386041023 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111967642033 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116846040091 0.0758088955206 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17025451824 0.150359130593 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108342349878 0.0667264976115 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 14.1392134831 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.86 48.8420337079 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.8971910112 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.2143820225 146% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.7820224719 144% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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