An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The job of a medical practitioner or a doctor is considered as the toughest job as they have to deal with someone's life. One has to go through a rigorous process of academics in order to call himself a doctor. A good doctor has knowledge of all fields and knows how to deal with any ailment the patient has. The prompt suggests that an ailing patient should have an easy access to his or her doctor's record of similarly affected patients. It believes that having such access will help the patient determine the competency of the doctor to treat his/her medical emergency. I would like cast light upon few ominous consequences which will result from such liberty of access to records.
Firstly, the relation of a doctor and his patient is based completely on professional privacy. A patient is most vulnerable in front of his doctor, and only the doctor knows what the patient is going through. If any other patient having similar ailments gains access to such records will breach the privacy of other patients and the entire profession of doctors will become unsafe. Moreover, a patient need both medical and mental support when he goes to see a doctor for his check up; if he comes to know that the doctor is undermining privacy protocols, the patient might hesitate to give proper information for his ailments, thereby resulting in a failed or faulty diagnosis. This compromises the safety and treatment of the ailment, thereby contradicting the sole purpose of medical practice.
Secondly, if such sensitive information falls into hands of apathetic people, then it might be used to blackmail other patients and will lead to extortion. This scenario will disturb the entire society and it will lose faith in doctors eventually. In addition to this, a person suffering through ailment is vulnerable, and he/she is an easy target to make some money. Hence, giving access to such sensitive information can also be used to sell fake or cheap medicines to patients. Many scandals of drugs and medicines might occur as people believe anyone who promises to heal their pain. This deception is extremely harmful for a patient as it will worsen the situation.
Thirdly, if patients have easy access to the records, they might stop visiting the doctor and directly consult other patients to ask what medicines they took in order to cure the ailment. For example, if John is suffering from cancer, and by referring to records, he comes to know that Alex (his colleague) had also suffered from cancer and was cured from it, it is only natural that John will ask Alex about his treatment, and will emulate Alex's treatment as his own in order to be cured. Ultimately, this breaches the privacy of Alex's treatments, and John is also taking medicines which were not suggested by his doctor, but his friend.
To summarize, it is a good thought that a patient should be able to determine the competency of a doctor to treat his/her medical ailment; but it is also true that many practitioners who cannot treat a particular disease always suggests another doctor who can treat it. It is completely unnecessary to make the medical history of other patients easily accessible to patients as it will compromise privacy and may result in a severe disaster in society, thereby causing chaos.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 364, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy access'.
Suggestion: easy access
...ests that an ailing patient should have an easy access to his or her doctors record of similar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, third, thirdly, as to, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2730.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 557.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9012567325 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62167305654 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470377019749 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 854.1 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0579702591 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.090909091 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3181818182 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45928299483 0.243740707755 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150195208173 0.0831039109588 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13084029335 0.0758088955206 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286871710953 0.150359130593 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136304275825 0.0667264976115 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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