Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet fer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
The Issue statement says that although the innovations such as video, computers and the Internet seem to offer innovative didactic methods to the students, but in reality, they disract the students from real learning. I completely disagree with this statement and the reasons for my disagreement are : Firstly, students grasp faster to the things they perceive, Secondly, the technological advances has myriad number of advantages than the disadvantages, it all depends on the extent of it's use. These reasons are dilineated below alongwith examples.
Firstly, Students grasp faster to the things they perceive much more than the things they hear. It is scientifical proven, that when you hear you only get 50%, but when you see it with your eyes you get more than 80%. In the archaic times, teachers used to teach students through books or theoretically so it was very cumbersome process for the student to create a picture in mind but in the modern day world, due to the technological advances, several new discoveries came up. For instance, now-a-days it is of paramount importance to have smart classrooms in every school, so the students can get things much easily than the ancient times. Now, it's easy to visualise through the videos. So, technological advances has manifold advantages.
Moreover, the technological advances like Internet has helped the students to search anything about any topic in just one click at their desk. Earlier students have to waste a lot of their time in searching for a topic in libraries but now they can get the information on just one click in Wikipedia. though, it has disadvantages too like students are becoming lethargic so, it should be used in exigent times only. It's use should be limited. Technological advantages helped in saving the time as well as money. Consider the case of Youtube, now you can didact yourself at home by seeing the videos of any professor. New, smart classrooms has helped you to get online tuitions from the teachers straight from the Haward's university directly to India. So, it has manifold advantages.
Lastly, as every coin has two sides, similarly technological advances and Internet too had disadvantages like students waste too much of their time in social apps like Facebook, Whatsapp etc which effect their health as well as their eyes. Now, learning power is decreasing due the internet, students are becoming torpid day by day as every assignment teacher assign to them they firstly search it in internet without even thinking about it. Internet crimes are increasing, students has been bullied. So, technological advantages has disadvantages too.
In a nutshell, i would restate my statement that whether a discovery is boon or bane it all depends on us. So, technology has been came up to assist us, it should be made a neccesity, it's use should be limited and parents should stringently guide their to how much time they should use.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, well, for instance, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2439.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 483.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04968944099 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82431517334 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501035196687 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.5640610455 60.3974514979 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.043478261 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164592018762 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489223643417 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638208785337 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101670137798 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809666816278 0.0667264976115 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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