"Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are
entirely harmless, they in fact, prevent people from developing into truly strong and
independent individuals."
Luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are sometimes choices of human beings to possess in life. The prompt states that luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life preclude people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. I partially disgree with the idea for 3 reasons.
Conveniences and luxuries in contemporary life in are materialistic things that every human being crave for in this contemporary world. Every human being in his/her life wants to lead a convenient and sometimes luxurious life. But everything needs balance and limit. Someone once said, “Genius is about knowing when to stop”. As a human being we should behave intellectually and lead a belanced life that’s not harmful for ourselves and others and also for the environment.Let’s give the example of using more featured luxurious smartphones.For some people,luxurious smartphones are not luxury but necessity. In some cases, having a luxurious smartphone that has more features make life more convenient because with a smartphone and internet service in your hand you san simply complete any task you want.Do you want to book a ticket to fly to USA? You can do it with a smartphone and internet service. More or less, any task is possible with a good featured smartphone and internet service. All of these gives productive result if you know how to use conveniences and luxurious productively.
On the other hand, suppose, teenagers, who thinks possessing a luxurious smartphone is cool and use a smartphone, simply far away from being a strong and independent individual. And in most cases teenagers uses smartphones for surfing over social media and spend a lot of time on social media unproductively.But teenagers or any individual,instead of spending the most of the time of their day on social media unproductively and futively can read articels,news,do reaserch with the help of the internet and smartphones.
Secondly,Providing people conveniences and luxurious, in one way,creates job sectors for people who are skilled in those specific sectors. Creating smartphones, attaching new features to them requires skilled engenieers.This gives good job opportunity for a lot of people and good technological base along with economical surplus to a country.That’s what conveniences and luxurious do on the opposite side of the coin.
In the final analysis, being a strong and independent individual is mostly related to mindset and how one likes to grow as human being.Leading a convenient and luxurious life has nothing to do with with the emergence and growth of strength and independence in the life of a human being.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, you know, in most cases, in some cases, more or less, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 415.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38072289157 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.44925766352 2.79657885939 123% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498795180723 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 94.5696133264 60.3974514979 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.352941176 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4117647059 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254714191656 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0973125127652 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117416987389 0.0758088955206 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172403953262 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116562114197 0.0667264976115 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.