"Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are
entirely harmless, they in fact, prevent people from developing into truly strong and
independent individuals."
-through luxieires being able to travel and
-technology- luxieries lives easirer-infact empowered on difficult
-maybe excessive- rely for baics
It is true, that people of contemporary life are living a more luxurious and convenient life as compared to the previous generations. This luxury could be possibly attributed to the peaceful lifestyle as well as the availability of basic amenities. The prompt suggests that many people view these luxuries as a significant factor that is preventing people from being truly strong and independent. I fundamentally disagree with the author's claim as I believe that these luxuries are in fact helping people to make appropriate decisions and can lead to their overall development. My viewpoints are aptly illustrated through the below-mentioned examples.
Firstly, one of the major luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life is technology. It has made our daily lives simpler and easier. For instance, we can perform basic calculations easily with the help of a calculator, or perhaps order any food or clothing item directly at our doorstep using various apps available on our phones. However, it should not be assumed that these luxuries can lead to a detrimental effect on the individual's capabilities. In fact, technology can help us in doing basic and monotonous jobs as a result of which we can concentrate on the more serious ones. For instance, the availability of several health care apps and websites has helped a person to receive immediate medical assistance without actually visiting the doctor. Thus, such websites and apps can help the person in saving his time and efforts. Thus, it can be said that technology can help people to make several decisions on their own without the need of being dependant on others for any help.
In addition to this, another major luxury available today is transport facilities and telecommunication systems. Due to transport facilities such as airplanes and trains, we can easily travel to different places and explore the cultures and traditions that are practiced in those countries. This, in turn, enlightens us as it can help us to gain different perspectives and ideologies of multifaceted people. Therefore, it leads to an increase in our knowledge and develops our ability to sympathize with other people. In earlier times, the general population did not have the opportunity to visit several places and hence were not aware of the conditions that existed in foreign countries. As a result, most of the people were narrow-minded and could not think rationally and logically. Therefore it can be proved that luxuries and conveniences can in fact strengthen our knowledge and overall thinking abilities.
To sum up, luxuries and conveniences and can have different interpretations and should not be always attributed to wealth and richness. The availability of these luxuries has in fact made our lives easier and has helped us in concentrating on more serious issues. Further, it has made us independent and has helped us in gaining different perspectives, and increased our overall thinking abilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...as compared to the previous generations.This luxury could be possibly attributed to ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a significant factor that is preventing people from being truly strong and indep...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun health seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some health'.
Suggestion: some health
... ones. For instance, the availablity of several health care apps and websites, has helped a pe...
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Line 3, column 964, Rule ID: DEPENDENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
Suggestion: dependent
... on their own without the need of being dependant on others for any help. In addition ...
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Line 5, column 35, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...p. In addition to this, another major luxury available today is transport faci...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...uld not think rationally and logically. Therefore it can be proved that luxuries and conv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2498.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24789915966 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06867986767 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 798.3 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5229070951 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.545454545 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6363636364 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95454545455 5.21951772744 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195333406695 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605775226518 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697774012197 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132762352881 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0851848595645 0.0667264976115 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.