In any enterprise, the process of making or doing something is ultimately more important than the final product
I completely agree with the first part of the statement but not with the latter. The final product is as important as the process of making it. Positive results for the efforts and hard-work put in the development of any enterprise project gives the employees the work satisfaction and also the motivation to work even harder for the upcoming projects.
The process of making involves various activities like research, analyzing, planing and yes, this part might be the most important of the journey to get to the outcome. Lets take an example of a student working on a science fair project. He puts in days of effort doing research, planing and finally builds it. On the day of the science fair, his project secured 5th position. he wasn't upset as he did enjoy the process of building the project from scratch with his own hands but had he worked on the design a little more and made the final product more appealing he would definitely secured 2nd or 3rd position. So, to prove my point that no matter how hard one works, they will definitely be judged on the extent of the outcome.
The same can be said for an enterprise or organisation where a particular team works on the project and on the submission day, client will only want to know if the project is ready to delivered or not. If the team were not able to deliver it on time, doesn't matter how much time and effort has been put into it, the final verdict from the client would be failed.
Thus, in light of the above it is evident that no matter the age and place, final result will always be as important as the time and process involved to get to it. But acknowledging the activities performed and then forming an opinion on the final product would be a better way to run an enterprise.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1434.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 319.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49529780564 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45560817264 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526645768025 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 704.065955056 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2996747075 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.307692308 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5384615385 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205076169201 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825264582336 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111721130701 0.0758088955206 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124473853489 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523641510724 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.8420337079 131% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 12.1639044944 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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