In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
We live in a world in which someone already has small significant work in something. If we ever go and brainstorm on some problems in society, we can point out so many prevalent problems, from small to big. But if just search about that problem, someone already has contributed some work on it. This is the biggest challenge in front of entrepreneurs. But this may not be the case always, in fact it has not been.
Everyone knows sir Issac Newton. A person who has made splendid work in almost every field of science. The apple which fell on the ground has resulted in such astonishing discoveries which each and every child studies and will be studying. There was no one before who had worked on gravity before. Newton had no influence, still he was able to discover.
I was in entrepreneurship development cell in my first two years of engineering. One of my friend, was also a part of our cell noticed particularly that people in Pune city (one of the major cities in India) receive processed milk. Whereas he was from village background and always had fresh milk from his childhood. He did not think twice and decided to start selling fresh, unprocessed milk in Pune and started that startup named farm-o-fresh. He has achieved significant growth for the startup(he has his own app and website). There was no one before him in Pune city who thought too do this before . He somewhere was his own influencer.
These entrepreneurs, scientists, founders of huge IT companies, developers of programming languages, etc do exits who did not have any influence of anyone's significant work but successfully aced in their fields. If you have self confidence that you can discover something useful which will help society you are good to start without anyone's influence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 580, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to do'?
Suggestion: to do
...one before him in Pune city who thought too do this before . He somewhere was his own ...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...Pune city who thought too do this before . He somewhere was his own influencer. ...
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Line 7, column 213, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... but successfully aced in their fields. If you have self confidence that you can d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, still, whereas, in fact, such as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 303.0 442.535393258 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83498349835 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82157661264 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610561056106 0.4932671777 124% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8110397299 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.1052631579 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9473684211 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10526315789 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0882923525715 0.243740707755 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0246314808339 0.0831039109588 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0302310464994 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0483876600572 0.150359130593 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148972942731 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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