In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
It is said that past achievements in any field are important for making any significant contribution. I agree with this point of view to some extent.
By reviewing the history, we can see that most societies owe to their people in the past because of the achievements and progress they had in their lives, and they provided the main context of any progress for the future generations. In each period, there were previous people who with their endeavor tried to make some impossible situations to possible ones. For example, the construction of a plane which has been done by wright’s brothers. They were able to turn the flight dream into reality. They could build the first plane without motor and fly in the sky. After that based on Wright's achievement and with new technologies, today the well- equipped giant planes have been built. All of us owe to previous people because of their inventions such as power, the car, and the train which have made our lives much easier than before.
However, in some scientific fields, we cannot see any achievement or endeavor of people in the past. For instance, most successes in space science are not because of the experiences and endeavors of previous people. In the past, there were no enough technologies and facilities for people to go traveling space. They could not have imagined that someone would be able to walk on the moon in the future. Such contemporary knowledge is based on up to date and new technology in modern life. Another example is renewable energy projects which are related to environment protection. In the past, the weather was good, and people were able to enjoy the fresh air. But today because of the population growth, a large number of cars and traffic, air pollution is high and most people have health problems. Therefore, for decreasing the problems of air pollution these projects have been run. These projects for solving new problems in modern life exist. In these projects, technologies that have not been in the past are used to protect the environment.
In conclusion, in my view, in some fields, past achievements are very influential but for some new fields such as space and renewable energy projects, they are not practical.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...today because of the population growth, a large number of cars and traffic, air pollution is high...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91755319149 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69262312131 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515957446809 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9460835228 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0476190476 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9047619048 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09523809524 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170405068779 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529427077575 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569511093164 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136945421975 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842804153849 0.0667264976115 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.