In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Does anyone envision creating something without having a little knowledge about it? Everyone does enter a field because something or the other about it intrigues them. I personally believe that in order to make progress, one puts his or her effort by knowing what has been achieved in the past and what fruit will it bear by further advancing it. The innovative and inventive ideas in the field of medicine and computers can be reflected upon to discern how past achievements influence making a significant contribution in a field.
Taking upon the revolutionary ideas that have been accomplished in the field of medicine seems sublime. How the field has proliferated and how the research and advancement in it has been able to find cures for a variety of everyday increasing diseases. For example, the invention of pacemaker that regulates the beating of the heart at a normal rate was remarkable. The vision of someone making that wouldn’t have just brought to life just for the sake of it. But the knowledge of that person, particularly about the functioning of the heart and cardio-thoracics led him to make such a device. The combination of medicine and technology made possible to achieve the unfathomable.
On the other hand, Computer technology is proliferating day by day; there have been various contributions of computer and information technology specialists in this field that has helped to alleviate various problems. It involves a gamut of things. From being able to create a robot to making it actually assist a human or a human like robot. At first, the robots that were created were just a conflation of electronics, mechanics and computer programming and initially they weren’t able to do much. However with this achievement, the people with the knowledge of these fields considering the path breaking achievement were able to infuse emotions in these robots making the human like. These endeavors were a result of the past achievements in these fields that led people to contribute more towards them.
By my reckoning, it is cardinal that a person should have to have some understanding and knowledge about any field of endeavor to make a significant contribution and that the past achievements may assist them in achieving it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 506, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ally they weren't able to do much. However with this achievement, the people with ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, so, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 371.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11590296496 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04889761954 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1355035139 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.647058824 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220733613549 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687902080383 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706227111293 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150055464066 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538373750691 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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