In any field of inquiry the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take I

The world has become more and more dependent on the imporvements on the any field of study that humankind need in order to be sustainable. Without any improvements accomplished by the indivdiuals and groups, there won’t be adoptation to the changes, so the humankind won’t be powerful anymore. With this reliance on the improvements, there is always somebody trying to expand the borders of the knowledge existed in any field of inquiry. It is attempting to think that new-commers have more importance than the individuals who have been obligated to work on that area since there are and ther will be newbies putting effort to make contribution. Furtherly, some argue that new-commers have diversified goals than the experienced ones, which leads them to be more ambitious. Therefore, at the end, there will be more meaningful results accomplished by new commers. However, ignoring the effect of experience and observations would lead the arguers to make wrong conclusions. Since the knowledge of an individual accumulates cumulatively, the experienced individuals are able to make relatively more meaningful interpretations, which leads them to make bigger contributions to the field of study than the new commers. In other words, the effect of cumulation becomes cruical when it comes to talk about knowledge and development.
To begin with, all of the individuals who live in a certain society learns by observing and practicing. The process of observation begins when the individual starts to have healthy communication with parents and the community. Moreover, practicing becomes available when the individual is able to use certain tools such as motor learning skills and intellectuality provided by the frontal area of the brain. When the individual is able to control all of these tools when he or she grows up, the reliance on the practicing and observations done on the consequences resulted from past attemps become more important for making developments and contributions. The benefits of the practicing which can be gained by spending time as much as possible can be explained in two ways. Firstly, by making as many pracice as possible leads the individual to understand the difficulties that can be related to personal incapabilities and structural discrepencies of the field of study. As a result, the experienced individuals would be able to improve their weaknesses by anticipating possible outcomes of the actions. For instance, researcher who have been working on computer science for a long time is able to anticipate the difficulties of constructing machine learnig algorithms because of lack of statistical understanding that theresearcher has. Secondly, making a lot of practices helps the individual to be able to understand the best way of learning which depends on the individuals’ personality. As a result, pace of learnign and solving problems is increased with the help of increased time spent on the field of inquiry, which results in more contribution than the new commers.
At the same time, one can argue that the effect of tragedies that the experiences on the field arises may lead the researcher not to be able to make developments. In other words, negative observations such as social isolation caused by previous attemps may lead the individual to frightened to continue to work on the field. Therefore, it is attempting to conclude that the beginners have more contribution on the filed because of lack of negative experiences. However, if the individual is able to make more practices and reach satifactorily better result, the negative consequences of the tragedies will be diminished.
Though, many feel that the beginners have more energy to make studies on and meanigful contributions, there are more important factors which makes experienced individuals favorable in terms of making improvements on the field.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 16, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ledge and development. To begin with, all of the individuals who live in a certain socie...
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Line 4, column 9, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun feel seems to be countable; consider using: 'many feels'.
Suggestion: many feels
...tragedies will be diminished. Though, many feel that the beginners have more energy to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 101.0 58.6224719101 172% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3256.0 2235.4752809 146% => OK
No of words: 611.0 442.535393258 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32896890344 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97176167858 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23797940837 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433715220949 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1031.4 704.065955056 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8199910444 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.666666667 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4583333333 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166566883435 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557265153548 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455857499447 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128159777541 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404596484833 0.0667264976115 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.1392134831 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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