History as a field of science includes reading lots of paper and evaluating different perspectives existed in the researchers in order to collect data and construct an objective scientific argument related to historical events. Furthermore, reserachers interested in history are obligated to form a evaluation method that considers the condition of the past instead of criticising by comparing with current conditions. With this huge effort to collect objective data, some argue that studying on history would lead the researcher to distinguish herself from subjective perspectives such as ignoring discerepencies between past and present. With the help of objectivity that prioritizes the period of time when the historical event occurred, researchers tend to ignore consequences of these events which have been observed after a long time. However, when the researchers begin to investigate on papers which more updated, the discrepencies between past and present become obvious for a researcher.
To begin with, researcher trying to understand a historical events should look at both the past and the results of the events, which leads the researcher to observe different time periods that carry different perspectives. That researcher will most probably face with different perspectives, different cultures, and different methods required solve the problems related to both environmental and sustainability of the systems. As a result, the researcher will realize that there are structural contrasts between the periods of time since the societies evolve according to time in terms of socio-economical structure and social relations. For instance, if a scientists tries to understand the meaning of cultural revolutions, the grounds that prepare these revolutions and the results that the societies face after the dramatic change should also be investigated. As a result of this investigation, the researcher will be aware of differences between the conditions of the past and the present. That is not to say that these alterations occur in every aspects of the societies. In other words, there are still things such as emotional relationships, fundamental needs that don’t change according to time. However, significancy of the change mostly related with big-scaled diversities occured in big-scaled structures such as socio-economical foms.
At the same time, historical periods determine the way of historical recordings, which leads scientists to make wrong conclusions by just observing different resources from different times. A researcher may conclude that the recording historical activities have decelerated during Ottoman empire compared to the Romes. However, people who have lived in the Otttoman empire still wrote everything that they have faced but the politicians didn’t allow the individuals to publish these records and lead them to destroy these records in order to be able to sustain the authority. As a result, if the researcher concludes that the people of Ottoman empire are different from us in terms of historical recording, it would mean that there are misconception. On the other hand, if the researcher is able to investigate different resources which focus on the period of Ottoman empire, he or she most probably would observe that they are less interested in political events because of they are mostly farmers. Therefore, we are now have less records related to political events of Ottoman empire not because of they are less interested in historical writing.
Though, many feel that the history shows us that we are all humans that we have all same living conditions independent from the periods of time that we are living in. However, discrepencies between the past and the present actually are significantly important, which can be understood by using historical science.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 298, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...rested in history are obligated to form a evaluation method that considers the co...
^
Line 1, column 691, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...elp of objectivity that prioritizes the period of time when the historical event occurred, res...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 61, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'event'?
Suggestion: event
...rcher trying to understand a historical events should look at both the past and the re...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 965, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
...are less interested in political events because of they are mostly farmers. Therefore, we are n...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1023, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...e mostly farmers. Therefore, we are now have less records related to political event...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1028, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun records is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...tly farmers. Therefore, we are now have less records related to political events of ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1091, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
... political events of Ottoman empire not because of they are less interested in historical writi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... less interested in historical writing. Though, many feel that the history shows us th...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 9, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun feel seems to be countable; consider using: 'many feels'.
Suggestion: many feels
...erested in historical writing. Though, many feel that the history shows us that we are a...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, for instance, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.3162921348 256% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 95.0 58.6224719101 162% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3236.0 2235.4752809 145% => OK
No of words: 584.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54109589041 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91590194646 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11688992664 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452054794521 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1018.8 704.065955056 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8092454827 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.095238095 118.986275619 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8095238095 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80952380952 5.21951772744 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171606383219 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529437067892 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035642651692 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113261200226 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175360008301 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.1392134831 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.