Because people increasingly feel compelled to share their personal details online, the right to privacy is eroding.
Various social media platforms such as Instagram and Facebook have been used by many people around the world. They may upload pictures and stories via their story lines or feeds which can make relationships between others, or followers, more intimate. Regarding this matter, the given prompt contends that the right to privacy is eroding since people feel increasingly compelled to share their personal information online. I mostly disagree with this argument for two reasons, but I do concede that unwary and indiscriminate sharing of personal details may undermine one's privacy.
First of all, due to the increased security online, the right to privacy is not readily deteriorated. Specifically, as there are applications or programs that protect users from the encroachment of privacy by hackers, online users need not to be excessively concerned whether their personal details may be abused by others. For instance, various social media platforms such as Facebook and Instagram use double authentication system to secure the privacy of their users. Furthermore, even those users can set the scope of availability to others when uploading pictures or stories in story lines or feeds. To elaborate, they can set the scope as to only friends, to only friends or followers, or to all. Moreover, those social media platforms also apprise their users of whether their personal information has been leaked and misused by others if suspicious activities have been detected. This example shows that a number of functions to protect one's privacy exist when sharing personal details online. Hence, even if people feel compelled to share those sensitive information online, they do not need to be overly concerned whether their right to privacy is encroached.
Secondly, people can control the extent to which they are willing to share personal details online. It is true that many online users feel that it is necessary to share personal information online due to its convenience and efficiency. However, this trend does not mandate them to share their most private and sensitive personal details such as their social security numbers, home addresses, and phone numbers to all people. For instance, suppose that a Facebook user is willing to share some personal information with others so that his or her friends or followers can know more about him or her. He or she may upload pictures with his or her friends or some personal experience with others recently. Sharing those information with others is unlikely to erode the right to privacy since those personal information cannot be egregiously misused by others. In others words, if the user adequately eschew uploading crucial personal information online and post only personal details that are less sensitive, then the concern of whether the right to privacy is weakened would be abated.
However, if people are unwary of whether they are sharing personal details that may harm their privacy, they can be victims of the piracy of private information. If they indiscriminately share personal details such as home address, credit card numbers, and phone numbers, hackers are likely to use that information to withdraw money from one's bank account or rob house based on the home address given in the post. This unscrupulous behavior may be amenable to the erosion of the right to privacy and may lead to detrimental consequence in terms of one's property and privacy.
In conclusion, the right to privacy is unlikely to be eroded since various measures to protect people's personal details prevail in almost all social media platforms and the encroachment of privacy can be prevented by one's prudence and wariness when sharing personal details online. However, if people are not careful of sharing sensitive and important information online, then this can lead to serious consequences.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 568, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...aring of personal details may undermine ones privacy. First of all, due to the in...
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Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: NEEDNT_TO_DO_AND_DONT_NEED_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...ivacy by hackers, online users need not to be excessively concerned whether their per...
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Line 3, column 946, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...s that a number of functions to protect ones privacy exist when sharing personal det...
^^^^
Line 5, column 711, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
...xperience with others recently. Sharing those information with others is unlikely to erode the ri...
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Line 7, column 339, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...that information to withdraw money from ones bank account or rob house based on the ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 549, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... to detrimental consequence in terms of ones property and privacy. In conclusion,...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3228.0 2235.4752809 144% => OK
No of words: 613.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26590538336 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97582523872 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73987793887 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.399673735726 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1033.2 704.065955056 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6609662967 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.5 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5416666667 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.21951772744 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42004593719 0.243740707755 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137829316001 0.0831039109588 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105778497858 0.0758088955206 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278348352765 0.150359130593 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549376147195 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 568, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...aring of personal details may undermine ones privacy. First of all, due to the in...
^^^^
Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: NEEDNT_TO_DO_AND_DONT_NEED_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...ivacy by hackers, online users need not to be excessively concerned whether their per...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 946, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...s that a number of functions to protect ones privacy exist when sharing personal det...
^^^^
Line 5, column 711, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
...xperience with others recently. Sharing those information with others is unlikely to erode the ri...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 339, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...that information to withdraw money from ones bank account or rob house based on the ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 549, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... to detrimental consequence in terms of ones property and privacy. In conclusion,...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3228.0 2235.4752809 144% => OK
No of words: 613.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26590538336 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97582523872 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73987793887 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.399673735726 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1033.2 704.065955056 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6609662967 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.5 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5416666667 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.21951772744 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42004593719 0.243740707755 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137829316001 0.0831039109588 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105778497858 0.0758088955206 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278348352765 0.150359130593 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549376147195 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.