The best way for a society to prepare its young for the leadership in government, industry or other field is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Leaders are those who have the ability to lead the team in unity and cooperation. Leaders are those who try to maintain equality between team members and always try to bring best from the team which can lead the team to progress. In our society from childhood, we have taught the tendency of competition. In every pace of life, we compete with one another some or the other way. The competitive spirit is imbibed in us from childhood itself let it be in examinations, sports or any other things we always compete with one another. But the best way to prepare young people for leadership is instilling in them a sense of cooperation. This can help the individual to achieve great success without a barrier.
Cooperation is key by which the leaders can have a healthy relationship within the industry. It is true that day by day technology is enhancing and everyone is on the verge to develop more and more and at great speed and thus competition will exist. But the competition must be by cooperation, it should not affect the relation of the companies. The leaders should not gain success by any hook and crook as the competition is increasing, they should not approach any illegal methods to achieve the heights due to increasing competition rather they should maintain friendly relation within the company as well with the other companies. If these qualities are ingrained from childhood in young age then this can be easier for the children to implement it in the future. But if the society teaches them to compete and proceed by any means to get success then they can prove hazardous for society.
In politics, there is always a spirit of competitive vibe between members of the opposite parties. They are always polemical and try to defame the status of other parties by saying something evil. Sometimes due to this rather than progressing of the country the bantering results in degradation of the country. The politicians are in constant verge to find some flaws in the current government and thus criticizing it and thus this leads fallacious message in the country. A competitive spirit can lead to disaster, it can be seen by the example of Adolf Hitler leadership. He was just bombarded to prove his community superior from the other communities and that led to devastation and ultimately he faced great criticism and also experienced the lowest phase of his life. Thus it can be inferred that competition should not outlandish the person's ability. On the other hand, we can see the cooperative spirit in a leader known as Abraham Lincoln, President of the United States, who led the government so effectively that he engraved his name in the world of history as the great leader of times. He maintained cooperation in the committee which led to the cessation of the Civil War.
In conclusion, it is rightly said that in young age society should instill the sense of cooperation in children rather than the competitive spirit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 775, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...perienced the lowest phase of his life. Thus it can be inferred that competition sho...
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Line 5, column 842, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...t competition should not outlandish the persons ability. On the other hand, we can see ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then, thus, well, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2443.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 504.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84722222222 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75856664607 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450396825397 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.07944167 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.217391304 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9130434783 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82608695652 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173131201325 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599446775896 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124546237458 0.0758088955206 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121070025426 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709506030789 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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