Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
The argument is about the arctic deer who lives on islands in Canada’s arctic regions. It is stated that they migrate from place to place for the search of food moving over ice during the course of the year. This implies they wander for food and they can inhabit in any region they wander in, this shows the adaptability nature of deer. While stating the argument the author fails to put strong points that support the reason for the decline of the deer.
Further, the author is stating that arctic deer is limited to an area that is warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed. This is not a satisfactory sentence to state that due to this reason arctic deer are declining. Deer are endemic and can easily adapt to new indigence and therefore they can find the food if they travel from place to place. It can be possible that there can be a decline in plants and due to that deer have to travel long distances for the search of food but this doesn’t imply that due to this they are declining. There can be multiple reasons.
It has been allegedly said by hunters that the number of deer are declining and it has been assumed that due to global-warming the ice is melting and thus deer have to travel from place to place and thus due to age-old migration they are declining. This reason is having some loopholes. It can be possible that due to hunters the number is declining. It’s has been a tradition from long decade to hunt for deer. It can be possible that the number of hunters has been increasing and thus killing of innocent deer took place and thus this resulted in declining of the number of deer.
The author is concerned that the decline in a number of deer is due to changes in the global warming effect. Due to global warming, the ice is melting and thus the deer have to travel from place to place and thus due to old-age migration their number is declining. The reason can vary which the author fails to describe in the argument. The author didn’t consider other reasons that can be possible for the decline of the deer. It can be possible that certain disease outbreak undertook the species of arctic deer which was not discovered and thus the declining of deer took place. It is necessary to have better supporting context to come to a certain conclusion.
In conclusion, want to emphasize that the author fails to purport strong reasons for declining of the species and also he didn’t undertake multiple phenomena for the declination. The author should have evaluated the prominent reason for declining and should have provided proper facts that stated that the putative reasons are valid.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 473 350
No. of Characters: 2115 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.664 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.471 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.265 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.694 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
... for the search of food moving over ice during the course of the year. This implies they wander for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2187.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 470.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65319148936 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41418491804 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.348936170213 0.468620217663 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9663153772 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4090909091 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3636363636 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54545454545 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273694439983 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955590682908 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104767818482 0.0701772020484 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17183862512 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125667675051 0.0628817314937 200% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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